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    dots Submission Name: Syco revisiteddots
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    Author: BenCollier
    Elite Ratio:    3.72 - 425/386/88
    Words: 104
    Class/Type: Poetry/Satire
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       To know this piece you must first read "Syco the Clown" by Wewak11. Only then can one fully appreciate the contex of this piece.


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    dotsSyco revisiteddots
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    "Syrup on my dog please"
    yes it's strange, no less than others'
    have I a want for sweets
    For sweets are my druthers

    As American as hot dogs
    And Austrailan as Lorikeets
    I will slosh through the bogs
    For the uniqueness of sweets

    So call me Syco or call me Psycho
    For it is only a unique palate
    Not injecting myself a hypo
    Or bludgening with a mallet

    Yes I dare the differing norm
    Syrup and hot dogs are simply stranged
    I am ready to face the gathering scorn
    Because a clown you see should be deranged




    Submitted on 2005-04-20 15:44:34     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      loved it. it might sounds crazy but it made perfect sense. i liked this mainly because of the first line. at first im thinking to myself yumm syrup then my thoughts went to gross why would you eat a dog thne i figured out thehot dog thign and then i concluded i was hungry. and yes that entire process ofthougth was nessecary to your life.
    | Posted on 2005-04-30 00:00:00 | by broken_dreamer | [ Reply to This ]
      lol. Really cute. I love writing psychotic poems, mine are usually dark and scary psycho though. I like this Ben. Not one of your best, but I still like it.
    | Posted on 2005-04-21 00:00:00 | by Areinaka | [ Reply to This ]
      The Clown that is Syko...you two have come up with a very interesting concept.
    You could almost make a series out of this.

    The Amazing Syko and the Hot Dog Honey Finger.


    Nice job you...very creative and funny.

    ~shawn
    | Posted on 2005-04-20 00:00:00 | by armand | [ Reply to This ]
      Clowns already scare me! You & Graeme r goofy clowns yourself but always poetic!

    I enjoyed his piece and i think your's is a good "the rest of the story..."

    Love, Peace, Joy!
    | Posted on 2005-04-20 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      All right Dave, let's not delve any more into the deranged fetishes of our mutual friend! LOL
    I like your defence of his weird ways, a very very fast retort, you must have had it ready! LOL
    Thanks, mate,

    Be Happy
    Graeme
    | Posted on 2005-04-20 00:00:00 | by wewak11 | [ Reply to This ]
      this is indeed an interesting addition to the Syco (syko) craze...and a little unsettling. all this talk of deranged clowns eating honey is going to give me nightmares!

    LOL i liked this though...a fitting sequel to the first!

    (you guys..shaking head)
    -Nikki
    | Posted on 2005-04-20 00:00:00 | by stolie77 | [ Reply to This ]
      this was great kind of funny but then kind of crasy in a good way great way to twist it up
    thanx for your comments on my post great write and inteesting read
    sandman
    | Posted on 2005-04-20 00:00:00 | by sandman | [ Reply to This ]


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