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    dots Submission Name: I like guysdots
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    Author: CleoCollier
    ASL Info:    40/F/South
    Elite Ratio:    4.44 - 83/84/26
    Words: 101
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
    Total Views: 1240
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 707



    Description:
       If I dedicate this to Bencollier, my sexy Gemini man who is ALL THAT, and more, does that get me out of trouble? I first told him this poem while bouncing on the bed-what fun!


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    I like guys who draw attention
    to their waists (and further down)
    by hanging graduation tassels
    or nametags from their belts.
    But even more I like the guys
    who can joke about doing it.

    I like guys who tolerate, nay, listen to
    brittle locust shell litanies,
    and are not threatened, or subdued;
    and can return a heinous rant
    until we stand there gasping,
    speechless from our prolixity.

    I like guys with grand appetites
    such as pregnant baleen whales might have
    for Rabelaisian stimulation;
    ones who when I lay before them
    sumptuous mounds of hedonism
    lick my platter clean.




    Submitted on 2005-04-20 22:06:59     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Hehe. This poem made me smile. I can't explain it. It had a light hearted type of passion to it and I think that is why I enjoyed it so. It was good!

    BCute

    (PS: You're right to be proud of your son's first piece! I checked it out! Added it to my favs. You have a very mature boy there!)
    | Posted on 2006-08-24 00:00:00 | by BCute | [ Reply to This ]
      I'm a total vocabulary whore so, naturally, I loved this. "prolixity" fuck me that's a sexy word. This was amazing. Love love love your word choice. I always find it pleasurable when a person uses grandiose language to express something so blatantly simple as desire. Thank you times a thousand for writing this. You made my night.

    drowning_queen

    (btw, I'm faving this. cheers)
    | Posted on 2005-08-29 00:00:00 | by drowning_queen | [ Reply to This ]
      I like guys who fall in love with girls like YOU.
    Very different, Fel, and very nicely put (are you a closet English major?)
    I checked you over from head to toes here (if you'll pardon the expression) and I only found things to kiss.
    FIVE STARS *****

    Now, Be Happy,

    Graeme
    | Posted on 2005-04-20 00:00:00 | by wewak11 | [ Reply to This ]
      This was fantastic, love the use of vocab. I thin it was appropriate in this poem, just be wary of using grandiose words just to impress. Each usage in this poem was, in my opinion, appropriate and visually effective, but it is something to be wary of. I love any writing that can be as frank as this about sexuality. Look forward to reading more posts. If you wouldn't mind, I think you might get a kick out of "Bedroom's lament" It has some similar elements. I'm adding this as a fave
    Ashley
    | Posted on 2005-04-20 00:00:00 | by queendepricate | [ Reply to This ]


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