I'm a total vocabulary whore so, naturally, I loved this. "prolixity" fuck me that's a sexy word. This was amazing. Love love love your word choice. I always find it pleasurable when a person uses grandiose language to express something so blatantly simple as desire. Thank you times a thousand for writing this. You made my night.
I like guys who fall in love with girls like YOU. Very different, Fel, and very nicely put (are you a closet English major?) I checked you over from head to toes here (if you'll pardon the expression) and I only found things to kiss. FIVE STARS *****
This was fantastic, love the use of vocab. I thin it was appropriate in this poem, just be wary of using grandiose words just to impress. Each usage in this poem was, in my opinion, appropriate and visually effective, but it is something to be wary of. I love any writing that can be as frank as this about sexuality. Look forward to reading more posts. If you wouldn't mind, I think you might get a kick out of "Bedroom's lament" It has some similar elements. I'm adding this as a fave Ashley