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    dots Submission Name: In Negative Amountsdots
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    Author: gavinspikenard
    ASL Info:    20-something/m/USA
    Elite Ratio:    2.85 - 274/334/104
    Words: 97
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    dotsIn Negative Amountsdots
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    Cut my body away from the mold of society
    and fill an old hole in my heart
    Grim is the future when you're walking in pieces
    Wasting time wailing at walls instead of breaking them
    A tree much like the rare monkey puzzle:
    The layout of my wrongs in the rawest of forms
    On one side stands a travesty, the other bears a fallacy
    What gives purpose to the subjects is a substance from my head
    Self-created burdens that I have no honest need for
    When you admit that you're not worthy
    is when the conformity caves




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      defiance of conformity goes down like a tonic. you are an owner of individualistic thoughts, and you want people to realize it. you also want them to know that you are above their level in that you acknowledge the fact that you are merely human and unworthy. another fantastic piece, my friend. there is no way to put the pieces back together, for it will always remain a useless, glued version of it's former self. much love, dear.
    hugs and broken mirrors,
    ~*dark_and_dreary*~
    | Posted on 2005-04-26 00:00:00 | by dark_and_dreary | [ Reply to This ]


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