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    dots Submission Name: silverdogdots
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    Author: closetpoet
    Elite Ratio:    2.25 - 51/106/70
    Words: 151
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 1254
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    sanctimonious hen
    pecking at us grains, with pious pen
    from someone who may be peeving,
    sorry if i've offended you, but i'm not leaving

    itís not enough for you
    that itís set up to warn when reviews are due.
    now we have poetry cops
    for those of us unworthy, youíd like to stop

    perhaps there are those that post
    for them, the shear expression may be the most
    the most, they hope to gain,
    never intending to add to your pain

    whatís so hard to understand?
    a simple compliment must be banned?
    maybe they donít want comments to drone on and on
    maybe itís enough to put something out, for us to look upon.

    maybe Iíll post two today
    and hope that you might look away
    or pray that I might write critique
    that you, in glorious splendor, might find unique




    Submitted on 2005-04-21 08:48:20     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I for one hope this made you feel better. Did you have a guilty thoughts after reading the journal, for I can assure you it wasn't written to you specifically. A lot of the older members who come to get constructive feedback feel the same. Nobody is trying to run you off, we're just trying to remind people of the expectations of the members of this site.
    | Posted on 2005-04-25 00:00:00 | by jaycee | [ Reply to This ]
      i like the structure of the poem because i have not seen stuff like this much before. I think i understand it pretty well also
    good work
    | Posted on 2005-04-21 00:00:00 | by cspj21 | [ Reply to This ]
      I think the meaning of the poem is that your pissed at someone for being self righteous, maybe for looking down upon others.
    Good job.
    Lynn
    | Posted on 2005-04-21 00:00:00 | by lynn7 | [ Reply to This ]
      I don't find this poem to be clear. It seems as if you have very good ideas but you don't know how to sort them out very well. Like me I'm the complete opposite I can put my thoughts in order but the poem is what it can be. Also I'm not getting the meaning of the poem. Overall reading this poem would be even better if you clear it up.
    | Posted on 2005-04-21 00:00:00 | by Queen Gemini | [ Reply to This ]


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