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    dots Submission Name: If I Were Goddots
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    Author: Ensult
    ASL Info:    19/Male/New York
    Elite Ratio:    3.01 - 115/114/31
    Words: 92
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
    Total Views: 757
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 522



    Description:
       I'm just talking about my Girlfriend.


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    dotsIf I Were Goddots
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    I would make the ocean from your tears
    The sun as bright as your smile
    The sky as clear as your skin
    Rivers as long as your hair
    Fruits as luscious as your lips

    I would make Trees as long as your legs
    Grass as straight as your eyelashes
    Clouds as soft as your heart
    Leaves as curved as your hips
    Sand the color of your eyes
    And shooting stars as sacred as your soul
    If I were God I would make the world as perfect as you





    Submitted on 2005-04-21 11:20:48     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      aaw that was so sweet, i love the way you appreciated even the smallest things, such as eyelashes,
    keep em cummin

    kyrenia
    | Posted on 2006-05-06 00:00:00 | by secret kisses | [ Reply to This ]
      It's an o.k. poem. I can tell you put a lot of thought into it. It just needed a little flow to it to really give it it's legs. I'm sure you'll take care of that.
    | Posted on 2005-04-21 00:00:00 | by SmoothePapa | [ Reply to This ]
      This poem is not simple but it's not that great either. I'm not saying I'm no Maya Angelou but you could make it a bit more...realistic.
    | Posted on 2005-04-21 00:00:00 | by Queen Gemini | [ Reply to This ]


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