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Our Problem?


Author: SmoothePapa
ASL Info:    24/m/FL
Elite Ratio:    2.65 - 55 /90 /16
Words: 179
Class/Type: Poetry /Religious
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This poem is about what problem is bigger; missing going to heaven or the problem listed in this poem. That's why the title has a question mark. So you can choose which problem is more greater than the other problem.


Our Problem?



If the sun stops shining,
and the clouds..all go away.
If it turns forever night,
and we never see the day.
If the birds stop singing,
and the water leaves the lake.
What would be our problem?
Do you know?
Could you say?
If the wind stops blowing,
and the air becomes a mist.
It the world stopped turning,
and the animals are dismissed.
If no foods on our table..
no matter how hard we wish.
What would be our problem?
Is it more?
Or is it less?
If the trees start dieing..
one by one..
next to next.
If we're sinking in some quicksand,
and it's almost to our necks.
If the government starts a scandal,
and our money they collect.
What would be our problem?
Is it simple?
Or perplexed?
When the sky opens up,
and the clouds began to shine.
When you see those people rising..
That have gave the Lord their lives.
If we don't go up,
and we're suddenly surprised.
What would be our problem?
Since we all have missed the ride.




Submitted on 2005-04-21 14:54:53     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  now this one was tight! i really liked this...i appreciate when a poet can look into themselves and find a situation that makes them passionate. one that give others something to provoke thought and shows a sense of belief. i applaud you on this piece!
-Nikki
| Posted on 2005-04-22 00:00:00 | by stolie77 | [ Reply to This ]
  Daaaaaaamn... Hold up real quick.

Yeah Li Li! "Still in Love", that's my joint!

Wow, this was hot, this was absolutely amazing. Posed some really good questions here. And I love how people talk so much about how they hope to go to heaven and do all the sh*t that's gonna send 'em to hell with gasoline drawers on... Anyway, I enjoyed this, it made me think.
| Posted on 2005-04-21 00:00:00 | by Phoenix2004 | [ Reply to This ]
  Keep on making posts like this and you and I are really going to be Elite's problem. This is the type of good [censored] that makes the haters come out.

I like how you never gave the reader a clue that this poem was about the rapture. At least I didn't have a clue...Good work dawg!

I'm with ya bro!



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| Posted on 2005-04-21 00:00:00 | by xtremegentleman | [ Reply to This ]
  umm humm this one certainly does give one's muse free flow. Now that I've read the piece I see how perfectly your title fits in...

as my sis said...bravo.

bd
| Posted on 2005-04-21 00:00:00 | by Brownsdelight | [ Reply to This ]
  BRAVO! This is the best one of yours that I've read so far. Kind of reminds me of that Brian McKnight song...when the Eagles forget how to fly...and it's 40 below in July...

LOVE THAT SONG!

You have a wonderful way with this topic of poetry. Proving you have a sweet side.

Good job!

Li Li
| Posted on 2005-04-21 00:00:00 | by Munchie_1226 | [ Reply to This ]


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