Description: I thought about this while thinking about my little sis. So I guess it is for her. I guess it doesn't matter what you think as long as she likes it, but I would like your opinion anyway.
A Child's Love -------------------------------------------
A child's love
a love worth having
so sweet and full of joy
innocent and caring
trust without thought
no requirements made
Most people don't realize
what a precious gift they're given
they take advantage
of something given freely
not seeing
what they discard so easily
length is good, I sense allot of pain in this one. I like the wording but I do have a little suggestion switch the lines "Most people don't realize what a precious gift they're given"
"What a precious gift they're given. Most poeple don't realize"
but that's just me. I usaully don't like explanitory beginings (i paragraphs begining in But, most, allot or sometimes) I always feel that it interupts the poem and begins an explanation.
but that's just my opinion. happy times and have a good one.
Great poem. It is short but u made it still sound really great. Usually short poems are not good but this one wow. I am impressed. Well goodluck ! byez!
this was so perfect short and simple anyone who has given up on a child will feel this poem deeply congratulations i will say this is probably the second or third best life poem ive read on the site great read and terrific write congrats to you sandman
this was so perfect short and simple anyone who has given up on a child will feel this poem deeply congratulations i will say this is probably the second or third best life poem ive read on the site great read and terrific write congrats to you sandman
This is a sweet and simple peom that gets the meaning across... It has such beauty good job! But even though i treasure it's simplicity i do believe that you could perhaps add more you seem to be holding back
Submission Name: A Child's Love
