Description: this is what i think and i want to know what you think
WHAT IS LOVE? -------------------------------------------
WHAT IS LOVE?
IT IS JUST A MERE ILLUSION
IT IS THERE TO MAKE YOU BELIEVE IN IT ONLY TO LET YOU DOWN
IT IS THERE TO PRETEND TO BE WHAT YOU WANT SO MUCH ONLY TO SHOW YOU WHO IT IS WHEN YOU'VE FALLEN SO DEEP
LOVE IS NOTHING MORE THEN A GAME SETUP TO MAKE YOU LOSE
I PLAYED THIS GAME AND NOW I HURT EVERYDAY
IT IS NOT UNTIL YOU LOSE THAT YOU SEE THE TRUE FACE OF LOVE
YOU NEVER SEE HOW MUCH IT TAKES FROM YOU
AND HOW MUCH IT MAKES YOU HURT
IN THE END ALTHOUGH WE LEARN THE GAME YET STILL LOSE WE ALL WANT IT
BECAUSE THE FEELING YOU GET WHILE PLAYING IS FAR MORE STRONG THEN THAT YOU GET AFTER YOU LOSE
SO WHAT IS LOVE?
ITS A MERE ILLUSION THERE TO MAKE YOU BELIEVE THEN GET HURT BUT STILL WANT IT EVEN AFTER THE PAIN
I'm gonna come write out and say it - this write is a bit too amateurish. I think i know what you're getting at and instead of making me focus on the poem i'm too busy thinking about you shouting at me in CAPS - take a moment and turn your anger inside out and you just might find that thier really is a poet underneath their somewhere.
love isn't analyisis...you either know what it is, and have it or you dont...if you think to much into it your going to get f ucked over...if your in love or have the love of a freind just let it be and dont think about it...with real love you dont have to think.
this isnt a poem..its you venting. im not sure what love is, im not even sure i believe in it really. i definitely know how you feel-everybody does. Once you cool off this piece has great potential and i think you should definitely fix it up, include more than just raw emmotion.
I really find it distracting to read posts in all capitals. It makes me feel like the user is too lazy to type out the work properly. I'm sorry, but I'm just being honest. I agree that this is amateurish because it really doesn't say anything I've never heard or read elsewhere. Try to include some unique imagery and make the topic your own. I don't mean to offend you; I'm just giving my opinion, and you can do with it what you'd like.