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Taste of Mortality

Author: Voodoo_Lounge
ASL Info:    21/F/OH
Elite Ratio:    2.29 - 408 /588 /171
Words: 34
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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Taste of Mortality

It's all blue here
In euphoria.
Have a taste
Of what you deny yourself.
Step back
Take a breath.
Sound and time
Moving all around you
Taste your mortality-
And leave it behind.

Submitted on 2004-04-04 12:50:42     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  It may be a short poem but it gets the job done. Another spin on it being short --- you could make it longer. But it workes well.
| Posted on 2004-04-05 00:00:00 | by Aj | [ Reply to This ]
  hmm....... thinking thinking ok got it. i like how, as anarius said, it says so much in such a small amount of words. i like the words you used the simpleness went well with the piece, in my opinion. i also enjoyed the meaning very much also only if euphoria was that easy to find. just leave mortallity behind....? i wish, i would be in a place far from euphoria. but good write nonetheless
| Posted on 2004-04-04 00:00:00 | by Skillessbasterd | [ Reply to This ]
  This is really good. I like "Have a taste/ Of what you deny yourself." You misspelled what though.
| Posted on 2004-04-04 00:00:00 | by cuddledumplin | [ Reply to This ]
  hmmmmm, almost reminds me of jim it has that smooth, soothing, yet exciting feel to it that he could capture so well.

"taste your mortality
and leave it behind"

thats [censored] jim if i ever heard it, i really like this one
| Posted on 2004-04-05 00:00:00 | by love gone wrong | [ Reply to This ]
  I keep being amazed on this site at how SO MUCH can be said with so little. Great Write
| Posted on 2004-04-04 00:00:00 | by Anarius | [ Reply to This ]

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