Description: Rough draft, don't mean to offened any one that is black that reads this or anythin like that.or just plain offened any one. Please comment on this it a rough draft.
I don't like you, You don't like me -------------------------------------------
I don't like you
You don't like me
Want to fight me
I want to fight you
Put your hands up Niger
Put your hands up bitch
Put your hands up hoe
Put your hands up
I come from a town called whoop a Niger’s ass
Ooo whip that Niger’s ass
I'm not scared of these of Niger’s
I'm not scared of these hoes
I'm definitely not scared of the tight t-shirt Niger of over there.
You tried to get me mad
but all you did was get me pissed off.
So what I’m white
Don't mean I don't know how to fight.
I blend in with the hood
I wear a purple heart
Watch out for me and my Niger’s
we are dark as night.
So you better keep out of our sight.
They call me the "God Father"
Ever since I got out of jail.
Don't fuck with me
Or
I 'll come to your hood and
I'll have every one switching on you like a switchblade.
You trying to be old school with the high fade
fuck that and let today’s future take charge.
While you in your in your high fade
I'm in my braids
Riding in my Escalade on my 28's
The bad thing there isn't enough room to fit the other girls inside when I come to your side.
I don't like you
You don't like me
Want to fight me
I want to fight you
Put your hands up Niger
Put your hands up bitch
Put your hands up hoe
Put your hands up
Remember I'm not scared to go back To jail
I'm not going to fail.
I flow like Muhammad Ali
I spit out rhymes out like ludicrous.
Put your hand's up and
get ready to have your lights knock out.
Put your hands up Niger
Put your hands up bitch
Put your hands up hoe
Put your hands up
Put your hands up
it does osund like you do want to offend this person you want to fight.i think it would be alot better with out the racial issue's.sorry this is note of my fav.
This was beautiful, haha, a little racist, but well who isn't these days? It could be a song even. Its a rap isn't it? Well, since it is so good, I feel I have to say this: "SHOW THOSE NIGGERS" LoL, I like it. Even when I was reading it, I was kinda rapping it.
well. i hate rap songs like this if this is it. and it wasnt original to me. another song about fighting and hard guys who do this and that and hoes and blah blah. boring really. there was no feeling. nothing interesting. i stopped reading at the part where you reapted the "chorus" i guess. thought maybe it would get better. maybe someone into rap would like this but too me it was dull and something everyone writes about.
poetry is supposed to be an expression of your thoughts and feelings. You seem insensitive and going off about how all black people are horrible is offensive and dumb. Have you met every black person? No...so who are you to judge? You suck, your ignorant, use writing for something else the racism and discrimanation.
um...ok...have you considered seeing a shrink?? I suggest Dr. Arnold in New York...he helped me...nice lyrics, very interesting..can't say i really relate though...
seems maybe like a rap song, and it lacks originality (as im sure the commenter above me jus said). but, to be specific, the entire theme is exactly like that of most of the rap songs played on radio/television. i'd advise excluding from all future rap songs (or poetry by you) the words "i spit rhymes like..." and "i flow like..." i didn't find any clever twists or play on words in it, like i usually find in rap songs. umm... maybe it'd be better with a beat behind it. but i would appreciate this more for the music behind it (supposing the music is good) than for the lyrics. also, the beginning of the poem i had the impression that you were racist. i mean i was picturing full-on ignorant KKK member up until the lines "I blend in with the hood" so i may be a lil biased (i feel for sum reason like im being too negative)
Submission Name: I don't like you, You don't like me
