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    dots Submission Name: These Webs #2(edited)dots
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    Author: darkened_soul
    Elite Ratio:    3.38 - 812/868/171
    Words: 85
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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       The second piece of the three part series


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    dotsThese Webs #2(edited)dots
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    You're still not gone away, my friend
    I still fear my life at an end
    I sitll fear letting you back in my life
    I still fear me needing my knife.

    I don't fear to hurt myself
    But I fear to hurt someone else
    I fear that all the things you do
    Will make me snap on you.

    I still hope you will just leave
    You've done nothing but decieve
    You've betrayed, lied and stole
    And now the anger has taken it's tole




    Submitted on 2005-04-22 14:19:39     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    any how, this jst is venting out your feeling,

    the poem really is not complete.. where do you start and how do you end, pay more focus please.

    | Posted on 2007-05-20 00:00:00 | by rawpot | [ Reply to This ]


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