It sounds like you used lots of random words- not a bad thing though. It makes the poem unique but yet throws the reader off as too what the poem is about. Lots of vocabulary rather than just simple words. It capivated me somehow. The title got my attention
I found this poem to be richyly packed with word manipulation "ordinariness in common placing" and loved the way you concluded this conversation "silence became our conversation of many words." Silence at time tells one more than the spoken word. Yes I think this piece was intriguing and enjoyed it much. `always smile, Cheryl.
Very compelling piece, it dragged me closer to the screen as I was reading it, and I didn't want to miss one word that you'd written, and I liked the way you ended it. Not too shabby for jotted-down thoughts! Wow! Five Stars! ***** Be Happy Graeme
when it all turns so real its easy for one to tell one who is lieing about love. un true love is capable and impatient to do anything.Besides you can read the presence of love in the air. the best way when i see your situation happen to me is get out of this before i'm hurt. i liked your creation. sam