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    dots Submission Name: Maybe an impossibilitydots
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    Author: wilted_
    ASL Info:    20/f/singapore
    Elite Ratio:    5.22 - 138/110/29
    Words: 142
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 1017
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1205



    Description:
       I had no idea where this was coming from.
    jus happened to scribble it down at work today. interpret it any way you wish because really, I know it's rambled and vague..



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    dotsMaybe an impossibilitydots
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    there is not a word I comprehend -
    you belong to the characters
    of a literary storyline
    I cannot decipher
    beyond the context of
    misinterpretation.

    sieving through the pages,
    I map out lines of irrelevance
    within the
    blueprint
    of your mindscape -

    random gestures
    of goodbyes;
    shuffling between
    hyperbolic acts of
    affection.

    coy moves
    betray
    signs of brief
    committment.

    the cloth you wring
    into a twisted
    graphic representation of
    your mangled heart -
    at once
    callous
    and
    destitute.

    and was it the desire for
    ordinariness in common placing
    that you hide behind
    the veil of
    novel adoration?

    maybe it isn't so -

    could I have
    disentangled the knots
    of the once
    ruined puzzle
    of this literary storyline?

    your intrigue strangeness
    subsides
    into a known
    familiarity.

    silence became
    our conversation of
    many words.




    Submitted on 2005-04-23 08:01:07     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      It sounds like you used lots of random words- not a bad thing though. It makes the poem unique but yet throws the reader off as too what the poem is about. Lots of vocabulary rather than just simple words. It capivated me somehow. The title got my attention
    | Posted on 2005-04-24 00:00:00 | by Emmalee | [ Reply to This ]
      I found this poem to be richyly packed with word manipulation "ordinariness in common placing" and loved the way you concluded this conversation "silence became our conversation of many words." Silence at time tells one more than the spoken word. Yes I think this piece was intriguing and enjoyed it much. `always smile, Cheryl.
    | Posted on 2005-04-24 00:00:00 | by ladyngold | [ Reply to This ]
      Very compelling piece, it dragged me closer to the screen as I was reading it, and I didn't want to miss one word that you'd written, and I liked the way you ended it.
    Not too shabby for jotted-down thoughts! Wow!
    Five Stars! *****
    Be Happy
    Graeme
    | Posted on 2005-04-23 00:00:00 | by wewak11 | [ Reply to This ]
      when it all turns so real its easy for one to tell one who is lieing about love. un true love is capable and impatient to do anything.Besides you can read the presence of love in the air. the best way when i see your situation happen to me is get out of this before i'm hurt. i liked your creation. sam
    | Posted on 2005-04-23 00:00:00 | by kittycampbel | [ Reply to This ]


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