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Who says sleep doesn't help?

Author: Mia
ASL Info:    17/F/MD
Elite Ratio:    2.99 - 103 /123 /52
Words: 141
Class/Type: Poetry /Serious
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Who says sleep doesn't help?

I go to bed
Sobbing, depressed
Wanting to kill myself
Going crazy

I cry myself to sleep
I dream of things I’ve never seen
Things that are frustrating
Confusing and frightening

As I sleep
The dreams fade away
Into a blankness
Into a darkness

Suddenly the darkness fades away
Becomes brighter
Until I open my eyes
And awaken

I look around
Same room, same house
Same place where I felt all that pain
But something seems better

It’s sunny and bright
I don’t feel as gloomy
Although I know what lies ahead
The horror I am to go through

But somehow
I feel a little better
A little lighter

Like part of the burden
Has been lifted away from me
So I’m stronger and rejuvenated
I’m ready to face that pain.

Submitted on 2005-04-23 08:55:24     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  This piece touched on one of my all-time favorite hobbies. :) Yes,I love to sleep. This is a very well-written tribute to the healing properties of sleep! :) I like the last stanza best, especially the use of the word 'rejuvenated', because (bad comment alert!) I can relate.
| Posted on 2005-07-19 00:00:00 | by Maverique | [ Reply to This ]
  Very good writing... amazing how its the first time i read about this, yet its something that helps a lot of people. I know exactly what you mean with this poem! I think just the fact that you have time with your mind in blank helps you rest and gives you strength to face any type of problem. Very good... but could use a little bit more of flow with it... nice work btw, keep it up!
| Posted on 2005-04-25 00:00:00 | by Pelon | [ Reply to This ]
  this osunds like me every night. it's really good. packed with emotion....i like your style. good job.
| Posted on 2005-04-23 00:00:00 | by secretdream0 | [ Reply to This ]

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