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    dots Submission Name: The Emo Poemdots
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    Author: wordslinger
    Elite Ratio:    6.54 - 234/97/31
    Words: 41
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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       This poem it touches a place in my heart...


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    dotsThe Emo Poemdots
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    My name is John.
    I like to cut myself.
    Nobody loves me.
    I cry to the sun for attention.
    But no one will give it to me.
    If nobody gives me any attention
    I'll do it again.
    My name is John.




    Submitted on 2005-04-24 09:34:26     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This was...wierd! LOL I don't know exactly what you are trying to state here...but *shrugs* hey...you expressed yourself! LOL Poor John! Don't cut yourself!

    *hands you a piece of wood*

    Ummmmm...I want one of them totem pole thingy doo woppers...can you cut that instead?

    Li Li
    | Posted on 2005-05-19 00:00:00 | by ThaCrib | [ Reply to This ]
      This is so funny and so true. I actually know an emo kid named John, I don't think he cuts himself, but this is perfect nonetheless. I don't hate emo kids persay. I can't say I hate anyone, but the way they try to get attention by making their lives seem so awful is no longer a stereotype, its reeal. This one time (and I really wasn't trying to be mean, I was only trying to open his eyes) I told this emo kid off because he was whining about his life. I spent probably five or ten minutes telling him that his life isn't bad at all because it could be much much worse. Then I told him to stop [censored]ing because no one cares, like in the real world, nobody is going to care. I told him to stop whining because it will never make it better, it will only annoy others so suck it up and keep going. I don't think he understood what I was really trying to tell him, but at least he stopped trying to draw others into such a weak attempt for pity. If you are going to cry, at least you don't have to make others feel the same. Thanks for the read.
    | Posted on 2005-04-29 00:00:00 | by ConScribe | [ Reply to This ]
      This is so funny and so true. I actually know an emo kid named John, I don't think he cuts himself, but this is perfect nonetheless. I don't hate emo kids persay. I can't say I hate anyone, but the way they try to get attention by making their lives seem so awful is no longer a stereotype, its reeal. This one time (and I really wasn't trying to be mean, I was only trying to open his eyes) I told this emo kid off because he was whining about his life. I spent probably five or ten minutes telling him that his life isn't bad at all because it could be much much worse. Then I told him to stop [censored]ing because no one cares, like in the real world, nobody is going to care. I told him to stop whining because it will never make it better, it will only annoy others so suck it up and keep going. I don't think he understood what I was really trying to tell him, but at least he stopped trying to draw others into such a weak attempt for pity. If you are going to cry, at least you don't have to make others feel the same. Thanks for the read.
    | Posted on 2005-04-29 00:00:00 | by ConScribe | [ Reply to This ]
      not a big emo fan... but i respect that form of rock... at least... in a sense that allows me to appreciate the used every once in a while. still a big industrial and indie rock fan though.

    this... i guess... simplifies the notion of wanting to be heard and allowing yourself to be vulnerable to do it.

    the sun... i think... was a suitable analogy since it technically has visual access to anything and to ask attention from the sun would be to ask attention from the mainstream.

    John... is the best choice of name since it is one of the most common names in most societies. in a way... it ventures on mediocrity... so i applaud you for that choice.
    | Posted on 2005-04-29 00:00:00 | by ANGELO | [ Reply to This ]
      Your name is not John
    You're a kick-arse person,
    You like the sun,
    and the moon (I presume?)
    You're a gifted writer,
    And I expect to be mentioned one day when you're on the Oprah Winfrey Show for your amazing books.
    Your name is not John.

    My rendition of it, at least.

    I'm happy you posted this, it made me smile. I like how differenlty people have take it in too. Just goes tos how how serious/laid back some people are. Personally, I made me smile. And I'm commmenting on you right now because it made me smile and to show you how cool a person you are for taking a bold step like this to put some differnt kinds of people in their place.

    Rock on.

    -Kayla
    | Posted on 2005-04-24 00:00:00 | by Superman | [ Reply to This ]
      hahahaha. very nice. my boifriend (Six_Grey) has written a few poems like this, mocking all the yippy-skippy teen-angst poetry that's floating around out there... so kudos to you. *md*


    wait, you weren't serious, right?
    | Posted on 2005-04-24 00:00:00 | by MerryDeath | [ Reply to This ]
      I realise im just a cliché' writer...But umm what the [censored] is this then ? ...The message could be quite good if there was anything in this poem ....My 5 yr old could do a better job ....So sad...Swapping talent for shock factor ....funny how people will tell you things to not cause a ruffle ...Hence the previous comments ...Basically youve just shown me why i shouldnt give a damn on your comment :)
    | Posted on 2005-04-24 00:00:00 | by Krysti | [ Reply to This ]
      this is a good example on how a personal poem should work, although it would have been nice to see myself repeated again. This is very straight forward and to the point. The feeling in this poem is very obvious.
    | Posted on 2005-04-24 00:00:00 | by qualitybait | [ Reply to This ]
      the way you've written this it reminds me how there might be a vein of sacrificial doom we're trying to erase from ages ago, Maybe it just came out, bled out.. I'm with *md* I don't think the teens who are doing it have any idea of the permanent state of non being called death. I"ve never seen anyone do this, I would stop them. Yeah, I'm am old soul in a young suit,
    this was a great write, bittersweet and right to the point.

    ~amun~
    | Posted on 2005-06-21 00:00:00 | by amun | [ Reply to This ]


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