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Author: kittycampbel
ASL Info:    23 male uganda
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Just having a lifes burdens on life can bring this halucination sometimes i guess.comments welcome


This life so full of care.

What dreams,
what joys we sacrifice
while being stung by man's trimmer,
Asking and asking the same questions why,

Cant I offer something to express my love
Like a tortoise counting her grand children
I spread my flower-like fingers
I would love to take you out
but you are mine.
I would love to help the poor
Yet I dont see what pity I deserve
Iam a true child of lack.......
I would wish to live a world of people.
Yet there exist so many,I live one life

This life so full of care

I want but a perfect life
Yet I have so many sins to commit
How many mouths to feed?
Like cats in the dark they gaze at me expectant
How much is enough
To make me get some rest to heal the sores
Of my feet and hands
I don't know.
This life so full of care!


Submitted on 2005-04-24 14:34:05     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  wow.. i like it.. ilike it alot.. i have no words to ex press how much i lik ehtis... just that.. its going to my faves..
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