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I'll Never Be


Author: Raven_s Miser
ASL Info:    16-female- wap
Elite Ratio:    4.64 - 68 /54 /18
Words: 155
Class/Type: Random Thoughts /Misc
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In life you learn so much about yourself and you realize who you are and this is what thins piece is about


I'll Never Be



As the days go by I see my differences and I let them all aside. The lables and the confussion of who I really am.

Welcome to my life:

A am not the best
not even as good as the rest.
I don't always care.
Because I'll throw down my hair
and let it blow in the crisp fall air.
I will take a chance
and except that final dance.
I don't need a man to make me happy
Or someone to tell me I look nice everytime they see me.
I do need to be loved for who I am
and be accepted for what I am.


I know I will never make a million
or have the perfect children.
But this is as close as I will get to the Nobel Prize
Every morning when I open my eyes.

Because this is who I am




Submitted on 2005-04-24 16:11:17     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  It was good samm, Kayla damn, you beat me to it. i was gonna comment on the spelling as well. but ohh well, It was good samm. i liked it as usual. But you know your loved for who you are so this one must be pretty old. Right? I think so....anyways, good flow, form, yada yada yada. lol yeah it was good.As always I'll see you later.Keep it up. Adios senorita.
| Posted on 2005-07-19 00:00:00 | by Restless_Heart | [ Reply to This ]
  Overall: Good
Spelling: Eh...just a couple typos.
Word Choice: Awesome
My rating: 8 out of 10.

"A [I] am not the best[-]
not even as good as the rest.
I don't always care. [,]
B[b]ecause I'll throw down my hair
and let it blow in the crisp fall air.
I will take a chance
and except [accept]that final[why final?] dance"

I don't need a man to make me happy
Or someone to tell me I look nice everytime they see me. [Or a kiss whenever you see me]
[I will do anything in my power that I can,
And be loved for all that I am]

Just a couple of suggestions, but you dont have to take them, The Except part though was just the wrong form.

Overall awesome job, nice inspirational piece.

-Kayla
| Posted on 2005-04-24 00:00:00 | by Superman | [ Reply to This ]
  I like how it says,"Welcome to my life" then describes how you feel.I don't think this is one of the best ones you have written,though
| Posted on 2005-06-03 00:00:00 | by ArtichokeMosher | [ Reply to This ]


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