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    dots Submission Name: I'll Never Bedots
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    Author: Raven_s Miser
    ASL Info:    16-female- wap
    Elite Ratio:    4.64 - 68/54/18
    Words: 155
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Misc
    Total Views: 959
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 839



    Description:
       In life you learn so much about yourself and you realize who you are and this is what thins piece is about


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    dots I'll Never Bedots
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    As the days go by I see my differences and I let them all aside. The lables and the confussion of who I really am.

    Welcome to my life:

    A am not the best
    not even as good as the rest.
    I don't always care.
    Because I'll throw down my hair
    and let it blow in the crisp fall air.
    I will take a chance
    and except that final dance.
    I don't need a man to make me happy
    Or someone to tell me I look nice everytime they see me.
    I do need to be loved for who I am
    and be accepted for what I am.


    I know I will never make a million
    or have the perfect children.
    But this is as close as I will get to the Nobel Prize
    Every morning when I open my eyes.

    Because this is who I am




    Submitted on 2005-04-24 16:11:17     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      It was good samm, Kayla damn, you beat me to it. i was gonna comment on the spelling as well. but ohh well, It was good samm. i liked it as usual. But you know your loved for who you are so this one must be pretty old. Right? I think so....anyways, good flow, form, yada yada yada. lol yeah it was good.As always I'll see you later.Keep it up. Adios senorita.
    | Posted on 2005-07-19 00:00:00 | by Restless_Heart | [ Reply to This ]
      Overall: Good
    Spelling: Eh...just a couple typos.
    Word Choice: Awesome
    My rating: 8 out of 10.

    "A [I] am not the best[-]
    not even as good as the rest.
    I don't always care. [,]
    B[b]ecause I'll throw down my hair
    and let it blow in the crisp fall air.
    I will take a chance
    and except [accept]that final[why final?] dance"

    I don't need a man to make me happy
    Or someone to tell me I look nice everytime they see me. [Or a kiss whenever you see me]
    [I will do anything in my power that I can,
    And be loved for all that I am]

    Just a couple of suggestions, but you dont have to take them, The Except part though was just the wrong form.

    Overall awesome job, nice inspirational piece.

    -Kayla
    | Posted on 2005-04-24 00:00:00 | by Superman | [ Reply to This ]
      I like how it says,"Welcome to my life" then describes how you feel.I don't think this is one of the best ones you have written,though
    | Posted on 2005-06-03 00:00:00 | by ArtichokeMosher | [ Reply to This ]


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