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    dots Submission Name: Files Now Fadingdots

    Author: lori_tab
    ASL Info:    27/f/alabama
    Elite Ratio:    4.33 - 1752/1517/481
    Words: 167
    Class/Type: Poetry/Death
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       This if you can't tell by the poem itself is just a girl looking at her life after she has killed herself and not understanding what was so bad that she erased her own life. I thought that this was an interesting perspective on this and I don't know...I read this quote that said to write something that you will enjoy and everyone else will like it as well...the rhymes were kinda bad and I may revise this but I like the concept.

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    dotsFiles Now Fadingdots

    I am filing through these folders
    My life is so mixed up
    there was the time that I was happy
    but this doesn't amount to much

    there a million drawings
    it seems odd I rememer everyone
    and as I go through these files I watch them all be undone

    with the pull of the trigger
    the sound of the gun
    the smell of the smoke that I breath in through my lungs

    I feel I am dissappearing
    my files erased from my life
    these thoughts race through my head
    I put down the knife

    Self destruction and all I can think of is this regret
    what a pretty life that I so easily could end
    what seemed so bad as I look at these files
    why was it so easy to end my life

    I am here in the middle of nowhere to be seen
    the files that were in my hands
    were erased by no one but me

    Submitted on 2005-04-25 11:53:48     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Nice chilling look at life ended far too soon and in a horrible manner. It's a heavy story to ingest but real and necessary to bring to light. I was however confused by the mentioning of a gun as the suicide tool and then soon after, a "knife."
    | Posted on 2005-04-27 00:00:00 | by gavinspikenard | [ Reply to This ]
      I really liked this poem, I can really relate to it and it makes me think of how lucky and happy I am that I'm alive. I do agree with decrepitmd however, more vivid words would make it sound a bit better.
    | Posted on 2005-04-25 00:00:00 | by kp_2007 | [ Reply to This ]

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