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Makeup: A Widespread Brainwash -------------------------------------------
I'll hide those pimples
fulfill those lips
color those cheeks
exaggerate those lashes
and after pregnancy
I'll cover those strech marks
because, you know
some results of childbirth are just plain
I'll conceal those wrinkles
along with your
thirteen year old daughter's
I'll be what makes you beautiful
and to the world I'll say very loudly
but very subtly, of course,
"A man's physical flaws are
much more acceptable
than a woman's."
I don't wear makeup. I hate it, it is the devil, it makes me feel dirty and fake and dirty and dirty some more just because of that nasty oily feeling it gives.
As for this poem, I think it would be much better if you could take it out of first person. It IS a good poem but sometimes first person really drains a poem of its goodness. Also, if you put it into the form of a prose poem (like a paragraph but with all the style of a poem) it would make it more creative and interesting.
God, this made me absolutely ABHOR what make-up has done to our culture. and yes a man's flaws are SSOSSssosooss much more acceptable it makes me WRETCH inside just thinking about it. Can I say I hate this poem just for the content's purposes? ;) An intelligent, to-the-point piece that doesn't need anything added, or anything taken away...and I've always thought it funny make-up for faces is like spell-check for Word perfect. Why does BLOODY EVERYTHING have to be typed nowadays? What, plain old pencil and paper not GOOD ENOUGH for you????...oops...sorry...I'm going off on a rant. Actually I should make a piece about plain ol' pencil and paper, it could prove interesting;) As you can plainly tell, this has provoked me greatly. Hope to read more of your writes! ~Truffness