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    dots Submission Name: A Woman's Trialsdots
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    Author: Munchie_1226
    ASL Info:    25/F/E.STL
    Elite Ratio:    4.49 - 1831/1834/185
    Words: 113
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 1333
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       I had a situation on Saturday that caused me to sit down and write, write, write.


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    dotsA Woman's Trialsdots
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    The story of a woman,
    Throughout all her trials.
    The distance she's walked,
    The number of miles.

    The pain and sorrow,
    That resides in her heart.
    From the stress and agony,
    Tearing her world apart.

    The love she believed in,
    With no guarantee.
    The three words that caused her,
    Blind to see.

    How she always tried,
    To give her all.
    Always stood back up,
    After every fall.

    Smiling throughout,
    All the grief.
    Staying relaxed,
    With no relief.

    Never knowing what,
    The next day brings.
    Or listening to the song,
    The sparrow sings.

    Just knowing to always,
    Believe in herself.
    Even after being placed,
    Back on the shelf.




    Submitted on 2005-04-25 12:37:34     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This what I see in you, your great inner strentgth. You have accomplish many great things in your life, your an awesome loving mother and a very good friend to me. Your poem does speak of one selfperspective,being question at time, though the answer is alway the same to me, your totally awesome.
    | Posted on 2005-04-28 00:00:00 | by edthepoet | [ Reply to This ]
      You know, I think its fantastic that you write, that you have the courage to post what you write - for you offer others indirect support through sharing your worst moments, and then being strong enough to stand back up, to show them to the world ...and Im rambling here, what I wanted to say was this: Youre an incredibly strong woman, and this is beautiful, and its in my faves...

    Katia
    | Posted on 2005-04-25 00:00:00 | by Katia | [ Reply to This ]
      WOW... tears are falling... that one was great. I'm adding it to my faves. No need to say anymore. I Love it! I guess I do have to say more, but what is there to say about perfection?? Stupid comment limits.

    Unicorn
    | Posted on 2005-04-25 00:00:00 | by Unicorn Poet | [ Reply to This ]
      Tears in my eyes...
    Li Li this was great. I love it. This just shows how strong you are. SOmetimes it is hard being a woman...but we will always be strong. Keep up the wonderful work chicka.

    Much love to ya,
    MiKkI**
    | Posted on 2005-04-25 00:00:00 | by MiKkI25 | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a special piece I see. So many women go through the hurt and rejection because men are so experimental. We tend to like trying out different things. (Speaking in general addressing the majority of men) This piece comes just as I posted "In Love's Waters" which is the bade for a woman to love again after being hurt. It is so hard...and I am experiencing the other end of that right now.

    It is sad that this is the story of so many women but women too must remember: There is only one man in this vast world that is your ordained spouse. If you meet someone that is not up to standard don't settle for less...That is a message for every woman who reads this piece. And this is from a man, a gentleman, xtremegentleman.



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    | Posted on 2005-04-25 00:00:00 | by xtremegentleman | [ Reply to This ]
      A good write.. describing a woman's inner strength. I like this line - "Always stood back up,
    after every fall." - It takes a strong woman to do that. And the last stanza was great ..
    A lovely poem, throughout..
    Nice work!
    ~Sandra
    | Posted on 2005-04-25 00:00:00 | by Intricate1 | [ Reply to This ]
      AWW li li i like to see your strength shine through and it has so brightly in this piece.

    i think that may be what pushes your pen..the trials that so many face, you give a voice to...very nice!

    -Nikki
    | Posted on 2005-04-25 00:00:00 | by stolie77 | [ Reply to This ]
      omg i loves this poem it si so true as i sit here with tears in my eyes i remince about my past life wow keep it up
    - Darkwarrior
    | Posted on 2005-04-25 00:00:00 | by Darkwarrior | [ Reply to This ]
      Now, I read this after reading your other poem... Probably better, because this one is calmer... This one really shows how strong you truly are, as opposed to the other one which makes you seem... well, bitter. But this was really beautiful... I think a lot of women can relate, and in turn, find their strength the same way you did...
    | Posted on 2005-04-27 00:00:00 | by Phoenix2004 | [ Reply to This ]


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