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    dots Submission Name: Follow Your Heartdots
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    Author: Darkwarrior
    ASL Info:    27
    Elite Ratio:    3.51 - 60/63/33
    Words: 130
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    Description:
       I wrote this for my ex and gave it to him yesterday. the 5 minutes it took him to read it (while i sat by his side) was the longest 5 minutes in my life he looked at me and i closed my eyes not knowing what to excpect and i waited and waited eyes still closed..........till his lips brushed against mine and all the waiting was worth just one kiss of reassurance that he is mine.....tears came to my eyes...tears of joy... oh how i love him so much... this poem was MY life saver... and he is my angel. so my life is on the start to something better.. now that we're together... Alicia Loves Louis for life


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    dotsFollow Your Heartdots
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    I know your probably confused
    and you don't know what to do
    but the right path to follow
    is what your heart will choose

    so listen to yourself
    and make up your mind
    because there is no help
    if you try to run and hide

    take the bull by its horn
    and think about it deeply
    whether its love or scorn
    let me go or keep me

    I'll stay by your side
    ever so patiently
    because I'd rather die
    then to see You without Me

    So if it's your heart that's won
    let me know with a kiss
    But if I was really not " the one"
    I'll leave it like this:

    "Good-bye my love,
    it's You, I'll always miss."




    Submitted on 2005-04-25 12:38:45     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      wow...ur right i get were your coming from. i love this poem and its very well written. i wish i had written it myself...lol. im glad u got ur man...keep it up!
    | Posted on 2005-05-06 00:00:00 | by PiecesOfMyHeart | [ Reply to This ]
      I like this... you did a great job of writing this. It convinced me, so convincing him of your love must have been pretty easy. Especially with the reaction you described in your description up top.

    Keep up the great work... I look forward to seeing more of your work.

    Unicorn.
    | Posted on 2005-04-29 00:00:00 | by Unicorn Poet | [ Reply to This ]
      That is so romantic.. you with your eyes closed.. and he answers your poem with a soft kiss.
    The poem itself is sweet and romantic too. . how could he not love you for that?
    Like this stanza...
    "take the bull by its horn
    and think about it deeply
    whether its love or scorn
    let me go or keep me"

    An enjoyable and lovely write.
    | Posted on 2005-04-25 00:00:00 | by Intricate1 | [ Reply to This ]
      This was so right on at the moment for me. I am in the same situation as this (obviously as you). Wonderfully stated. Very well put together. And I definitely feel your pain and emotion.

    Is that your name? Alicia? How ironic!

    WOW!

    Li Li
    | Posted on 2005-04-25 00:00:00 | by Munchie_1226 | [ Reply to This ]
      Really cool. I love the line, "Take the bull by its horn." Great job. I hope you guys are happy for a long time. Oh, and way to save your arse with a poem. :P
    | Posted on 2005-04-25 00:00:00 | by Areinaka | [ Reply to This ]


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