What is this scent?
That I have discovered in my room.
It is quite unusual,
it smells just like perfume.
I wonder whose is it,
and why it's so strong?
It is only twelve o'clock,
my wife should not be home.
Why bother I'm going to be to rest.
This scent has given me a headache,
and also hurts my chest.
Right beyond my walls.
I fear it's a robber,
I'd better give the cops a call.
Hello.. Operator give me F.L.P.D.
Someones making noises,
and I know it isn't me.
Alright, just be calm
your help is on the way
don't do anything drastic,
or the news displays your face.
Now let me look around my house.
This perfume's not familiar,
and it sure is not my spouses.
So I stay on my adventure.. looking for a being
Hold it! One moment!
Whose that moving behind my screens.
I ran to take a look at it,
and once I was there.
The scene I encountered,
would make any mans temper flare.
Today on my birthday,
in my very own house.
I saw another woman making love to my spouse.
I couldn't help myself.
I became full of rage.
Like some kind of animal..
locked inside a cage.
So I let it all loose
I became a madman,
and when it was all over,
the police cuffed my hands.
They said to me,
"Mr. do you know what you have done"?
My answer was yes,
and I admit it was no fun.
I killed them.
| Such a "Fun" read . My gosh. . . . . unexpected. i was really thinking it was gona be some sensual poem of you describing your girlfriends lovely "scent" and how u love only to read . . . . LOL. |
|| Posted on 2005-05-01 00:00:00 | by AfricanPrincess | [ Reply to This ] || Nice write of course. The ending was hot. I think I'm going to do a mystery now. Yeah, I better get to work on that...|
|| Posted on 2005-04-26 00:00:00 | by xtremegentleman | [ Reply to This ] || Surprise ending indeed...I couldn't help but to think of D'Angelo's lyrics...[censored]...damn...motha f*cka...why am I wearing handcuffs? |
excellent story. Lust, passion, sex and murder...oh sh*t let me get Fox on the horn...move over desperate housewifes!
|| Posted on 2005-04-25 00:00:00 | by Brownsdelight | [ Reply to This ] || well, I was surprised to say the least. Very unexpected ending. I like the scheme of the rhyme. The last line works well with everything. Keep up the good work sir.||| Posted on 2005-04-25 00:00:00 | by St. Agatha | [ Reply to This ] || Brutal. Good, but brutal. Good ending. It was like a mystery novel. You slowly gave bits and pieces of information, and you had me guessing what was going to happen next. It was such a good read. Keep it up!|
|| Posted on 2005-04-25 00:00:00 | by juss_kriss | [ Reply to This ] || Interesting. That's about all I can say. I like the way it built up to the ending. You had me thinking at first that it was going to be one thing but then it ended up being something else I liked it.||| Posted on 2005-04-25 00:00:00 | by EL | [ Reply to This ] |