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The American Dream

Author: SmoothePapa
ASL Info:    24/m/FL
Elite Ratio:    2.65 - 55 /90 /16
Words: 160
Class/Type: Poetry /Longing
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The American Dream

Here is my thought of the American Dream.
A nice big house that is totally clean.
Four bedrooms, two baths,
and plenty of green.
One wife, three children
do you know what I mean.
Two Lincoln Navigators, and a luxury ride.
On football Sunday, the barbeque's outside.
We're yelling, and screaming
ruting for our own teams.
We got some snow crabs,
you know they gotta be steamed.
Trips to different places..other countries different styles.
If I like the introduction,
well..I might stay awhile.
Relaxation in a hot tub,
or better yet a Gacuzzi.
A romantic night alone
with who else..
Yours truly.
There's no sin in loving the natural materials of life.
Sixty-three inch TV's, and dozens of Nike's.
Diamonds and rubies
pick anyone that you like.
Rolex watches, Gucci Wallets, Armani suits
that's all tight.
This is my perception of the American Dream,
and you can bet before I'm done with life
I'll have all these things.

Submitted on 2005-04-25 15:42:51     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  don't we all want these things to some extent? i can see where you're coming from, cuz i know sometimes i be like "yo, i'ma have a home theater when i get my mansion", crazy sh*t like that. at least you're clear about what you want. now all you gotta do is go out there and get it.

| Posted on 2005-05-02 00:00:00 | by Phoenix2004 | [ Reply to This ]
  here's a piece my man would relate to...seems like we always want it all don't we? I say sure its fine to indulge in the finer things I like to rock my Gucci purse and Channel sunglassess. but if you don't have love...then these things are simply that things...

Aside from the few typo's this was a fine piece. Keep striving papi and you too will have a nice slice of the American pie.
| Posted on 2005-04-25 00:00:00 | by Brownsdelight | [ Reply to This ]
  Well, I don't really know if I liked this or not. Though you are American and you wrote this based on you and what you felt/thought, people in other countries can have the same dream.
| Posted on 2005-04-25 00:00:00 | by juss_kriss | [ Reply to This ]
  I like this.I have to be honest when I first read the title I thought it was going to be like all the others that have the same type of title but it wasn't. I really enjoyed reading it. I like how it was original, the flow was easy to follow, and it just plainly was well written. Nice job.
| Posted on 2005-04-25 00:00:00 | by EL | [ Reply to This ]

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