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    dots Submission Name: "Little Daisy Daydream"dots
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    Author: Epiphany
    ASL Info:    42/F/Universe
    Elite Ratio:    4.38 - 3342/2139/390
    Words: 81
    Class/Type: Poetry/Comedy
    Total Views: 468
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    Description:
       I have been inspired lately by some of the children's stories/prose/poems, etc. I pulled out part of a children's book I was going to do with fun art. I have another somewhere where she's at school & how her mind drifts off & what fun she has! This needs to be cleaned up & finished but I'm at work & I just snuck this in!
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    dots"Little Daisy Daydream"dots
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    Little Daisy Daydream
    doing chores
    one summer's day

    Her hands make
    sweeping movements;
    her mind just drifts away...

    In her imagination
    chores still need
    to be done

    But with her childlike
    innocence all are
    games of fun!

    So sweeping isn't
    dreary, what
    fun to make a bed!

    The vacuum is
    a cloud floating
    where it's lazily led!

    Dishes dance
    with silverware
    in the sink's bubbles

    With Daisy cleaning
    there's never
    any troubles




    Submitted on 2005-04-25 17:52:29     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Delightful! To think of everyday chores as fun fantacies is great; a novel idea that could really work!
    | Posted on 2011-05-30 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]
      Merry Meet Epiphany. This is such a cute poem. Do you have children to help you come up with poems like these? If not you posses an absolutely fabulous imagination. This is the poem I read after Princess, and I must say you have inspired me to go home and write about my own daughters. Thank you for the inspriation. Blessed Be Andrea
    | Posted on 2005-05-25 00:00:00 | by magickandie | [ Reply to This ]
      aw this was cute. i try to do that, when i'm cleaning my room, make it fun... it's harder when you're as old as me though, lol. i wish i was still at that age, or had the innocence of that age, to turn everything into an adventure. *sigh* damn i miss being a kid... sorry. anyway, i think i'll keep this poem in mind the next time i have chores to do. maybe i, like daisy, will find my mind drifting away...
    | Posted on 2005-04-28 00:00:00 | by Phoenix2004 | [ Reply to This ]
      Little Daisy sure reminds me of someone I know. Hmmm...

    This was fun and enjoyable to read. I think it would make an excellent childrens book to when put together with some art. I could just see the pages now. Very well done. The only thing I would change would be the second to last line:

    And with Daisy cleaning
    there are never
    any troubles

    Just a suggestion, it seems to flow a little better. Have a great one Ballarina and keep smilin'
    | Posted on 2005-04-26 00:00:00 | by hyproglo | [ Reply to This ]
      *hugs* a feel good poem that puts a smile unknowingly on my lips. if only we can retain the imagination of a child as we once again stumble upon unexpected joy in the most mundane things in life. my relief teaching experience in junior school really made me realize that I should never cease to be amazed by the little wonders we can so easily neglect in life.

    thanks for the great read.

    cheers!
    rachel
    | Posted on 2005-04-26 00:00:00 | by wilted_ | [ Reply to This ]
      *laughs* i wish i could make my chores just as interesting! somehow in my mind the object becomes the enemy. curse you evil vaccume cleaner.
    *coughs* sorry, got a little off track. anyhow, this is a cute little piece but i have a question. you said you pulled this out of a book. all of it or did you just grab the idea?
    -the wildchild
    | Posted on 2005-04-25 00:00:00 | by wildchild | [ Reply to This ]
      Good and entertaining :)...I just wish I had someone to do my chores for me :P (maybe the sheep...) oops, sorry :P...A bit of a different style than I've seen from you :)...The only suggestion/suggestions I can see:
    So sweeping isn't
    dreary, what
    fun to make a bed!

    The vacuum is
    a cloud floating
    where it's lazily led!

    and...
    Dishes dance
    with silverware
    in the sink's bubbles

    With Daisy cleaning
    there's never
    any troubles

    Those two sequences seemed to be a little bit off <shrug>

    I did however enjoy this E mence Lee

    KPWRTNG

    STW
    | Posted on 2005-04-25 00:00:00 | by Stwcjj | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a sweet little work that I find very refreshing. How wonderful it is to read a poem about the ordinary beauty of life. Of course you can't go too wrong observing the lovely children and their lack of caring about the daily troubles we endure. I think you are right that it could use a little work but it has all the qualities of a great poem. Dan
    | Posted on 2005-04-25 00:00:00 | by dmm | [ Reply to This ]


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