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    dots Submission Name: Bubblesdots
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    Author: Epiphany
    ASL Info:    42/F/Universe
    Elite Ratio:    4.38 - 3342/2139/390
    Words: 30
    Class/Type: Prose/Love
    Total Views: 604
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 349



    Description:
       The river & bubblez..."i'm" always so thankful to God that "i" have the environment "i" have 2 be inspired!!!
    Hyproglo & "i" drinking wine by the waters of the American River & blowing bubblez 2 "infinity & beyond"....
    Love,Peace,Joy!!!
    Great week 2 ALL!!!


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    dotsBubblesdots
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    Bubbles
    purple, green,
    gold...
    float
    the river
    old...
    Colors
    dance and
    gloat;
    instances
    here, there
    float~~~
    non-existant
    lone...
    "1"
    Hues
    drifting 2
    "Son:... ; > }
    become "C"
    life




    Submitted on 2005-04-25 23:15:58     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      well, what can i say, i freakin really enjoyed reading this! i loved how you painted such a vibrant and active picture with minimal words. yeah, some of it is confusing, but that's fine, i'm not a big fan of closure or happy endings anyway. so, all that to say "very very well done" :)
    | Posted on 2005-04-26 00:00:00 | by treybur | [ Reply to This ]
      mmmmm...bubbles. Delicate and they float along their ways. Drifting over waves and the colors in the sunlight are just as you described them. This was a very peaceful and serene piece of writing. Good to the last *pop*
    | Posted on 2005-04-26 00:00:00 | by hyproglo | [ Reply to This ]
      :) Nice Imagery...bubble,bubbles everywhere :)...as far as the Son...;>} becomes "C" life...is this perhaps a reference of watching your son swimming in the river?...My interpretive skills are not that good at 4:30, but tha'ts what I'm thinkin :)

    KewlPoeM

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    | Posted on 2005-04-26 00:00:00 | by Stwcjj | [ Reply to This ]
      hola me former fellow new mexican...


    well you completely had me through this piece not only was i envisioning bubbles and all their beautiful colors in the sunlight but I had this peaceful and serene feeling...then i got to "drifting 2
    "Son:... ; > }
    become "C"
    life" and got completely lost...*says in buggs bunny voice* "maybe i made a wrong turn in Albuquerque"

    if you could explain that last part to my daft mind perhaps then I can become one with this piece...
    | Posted on 2005-04-25 00:00:00 | by Brownsdelight | [ Reply to This ]


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