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    dots Submission Name: Painted in Paindots
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    Author: lori_tab
    ASL Info:    27/f/alabama
    Elite Ratio:    4.33 - 1752/1517/481
    Words: 70
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsPainted in Paindots
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    The paint has dried
    and forever her face is scarred
    acrylic tears but they still feel pain
    charcoal wounds but she's still in shame

    the paint has dried
    not the masterpiece she had hoped for
    just another symbol of herself
    just another heart of pain

    her canvas is her diary
    her broken heart drawn from life
    a portrait of her emotions
    and she still can't get it right.




    Submitted on 2005-04-26 12:14:41     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I like this very well. It kicked ass! This was well written and the words fit together well. Great write! I can't really think of anything to make this better.
    | Posted on 2005-05-19 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]
      damn girl, now we're talking; well done. short, sweet, and allusive. definately stands from your others, and shows growth. I like the terms' "acrylic tears"&"charcoal wounds", still while, one of your best, i can still sense you holding back at some extant, and still using your mind, as opposed to your heart and soul, let your them speak, and your mind will translate, you'll notice the difference
    | Posted on 2005-05-05 00:00:00 | by dismentled | [ Reply to This ]
      i think u read this to me on the phone...if u did, i liked it then and i like it now...great write for real/ very inspirational sounding, i hope u get ok, and stop worrying so much about me...lol, take care jazzy, bye
    | Posted on 2005-04-29 00:00:00 | by medicated | [ Reply to This ]
      the paint in my world is forever changing different shades of gray uve inspired me into writing another poem so im goin to piece it together make sure u read it
    great write kiu
    -Darkwarrior
    | Posted on 2005-04-26 00:00:00 | by Darkwarrior | [ Reply to This ]


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