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    dots Submission Name: Fuck Friendshipsdots
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    Author: dancer06
    ASL Info:    20/f
    Elite Ratio:    4.74 - 232/171/43
    Words: 172
    Class/Type: Poetry/You left me
    Total Views: 194
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    Bytes: 1039



    Description:
       I love my friend with all my heart, but i have to let her go. for she was what caused my heart to break, and made me stoop so low.


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    I used to have a friendship.
    One that could never be broken.
    But then I got a tip,
    That you were sleeping with a lot of men.
    Because I didn't approve,
    You found a friend who did.
    I tried to step in but you told me to move.
    I released a monster when I opened the lid.

    Well get over yourself and move on.
    I moved on and feel better.
    It's best that you are gone.
    But i wrote you one last letter
    To tell you I couldn't take it,
    And how dare you challenge "us"
    You do things so you can fit.
    Yet u still didn't listen when i made a fuss.

    So give me back my memories,
    Because I can't let mine go.
    My heart of friendship has no keys,
    And I got over my "all time low"
    Sure I'll miss your stupidity,
    And making me laugh me when im down.
    But you seem to have lost your ability,
    Because I now have a full time frown.




    Submitted on 2005-04-26 13:37:35     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      OUC to the H! Damn...

    I heart thys because I've hadd similar eXperiences and whatnot... The title screamed at me to read it. And it was very well done- it yelled at me and made me hate as well- but not hate in the badd way. If you kno what I mean?

    Peace, love and awesome moist cake -

    ~MJ~
    | Posted on 2005-09-03 00:00:00 | by Six_Grey | [ Reply to This ]
      Blah stupid friends you care so much about but you have to let go because they make stupid decisions even though you tell them that its not a very smart thing to do. I think back to how many people I've met and loved and even am related to that I've had to do that with and. . *Sighs*. It hurts seeing them drive past or walk past you on the street. I'm sorry my Cat has to go through this. Words of Widsom: Sweetie, get the [censored] outa this town! It'll kill you, its almost choking me.
    ~Abby
    | Posted on 2005-04-26 00:00:00 | by BCute | [ Reply to This ]
      I liked
    "So give me back my memories,
    Because I can't let mine go."
    However the rest seems kinda smuged so to speak. I can get where you're comign from, but some of it seems there just to incorporate a rhyme that isn't necessary. NOt being the writer i can't say how, or where it came from, but as one i know it needs to come naturally, you need to feel ti with your heart and release it with the mind. Hope you find some better friends, take care
    | Posted on 2005-04-26 00:00:00 | by dismentled | [ Reply to This ]


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