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Final Hour


Author: Zu
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this is my second write about a "lost people". i was inspired by the movie "last samurai" and dream evil (the band). just need reviews and it would be good if you could also read the last warrior (http://www.eliteskills.com/z/53864).


Final Hour



The smell of dust and blood
Filtering through the rage of battle
Last time we’re alive in this world
In the night before the advent of light
The water under the bridge
Flowing silently, waiting for the fight.

We will never back down
Ready to face death
The forests will be devoid of sound
When we attack in stealth
Tomorrow our fates will be decided
Tomorrow we will fight for our honour
Tomorrow we will stand united
Tomorrow will be the final hour.

The gleam of steel in the moonlight
Shining in our grim eyes like jewels
Blinding to a white our sight
Midnight strikes the church bell
Ringing with all its might
Never stopping, trying to tell.

We will never back down
Ready to face death
The forests will be devoid of sound
When we attack in stealth
Tomorrow our fates will be decided
Tomorrow we will fight for our honour
Tomorrow we will stand united
Tomorrow will be the final hour.

Fire and blood reign
Fear is on all four sides
Spread word through the plains
The enemy is moving with long strides.

We will never back down
Ready to face death
The forests will be devoid of sound
When we attack in stealth
Tomorrow our fates will be decided
Tomorrow we will fight for our honour
Tomorrow we will stand united
Tomorrow will be the final hour.




Submitted on 2005-04-26 14:53:47     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  This is an amazing song. The thing about music is that the lyrics need to be kept simple and you did a awesome job at keeping the simplisity and having a good meaning and thesis throughout the whole song.

You made it personal, making the list ener/reader feel that they are right there, in with it alll, It captures a well thought out description and reaaly [paints the picture.

My favorite part is the chorus, it seems so profound and a warning all should adhere to. This peice is a favorite, definitaly.

Take care
much love
kaity
| Posted on 2005-05-06 00:00:00 | by Kaitylizzy | [ Reply to This ]
  You know I read this once and I would've SWORN I commented on it. How odd. Oh well, here we go.

Overall I liked this. I'm not a heavy rock fan, but every now and then when you want some kickyouinthebutt music to get you going, a song like this is exactly what you need. It was strongly worded and supported with images in the minds eye (I like that phrase:O) Your vocabulary was excellently chosen, also. It was a simple vocab, but it fit your descriptions so well I had to smile when reading this.

"Midnight strikes the church bell
Ringing with all its might
Never stopping, trying to tell."

I like the first two lines there, however I think you can do much better for the last line. Perhaps: "Breaking the silence in heaven and hell." or something. Its your piece and I'm sure you could think of something much better.

Overall, excellent job as always Zu! I
m really sorry I didnt comment on this the first time I read it, I wish I had because I can undestand where you're coming from in your last journal entry. Ahhhh, we'll see.

-Kayla
| Posted on 2005-05-05 00:00:00 | by Superman | [ Reply to This ]
  Zu,
I really think this will be a good song. The structure is nice and steady between verses (I assumed the last strophe before the stanza was a bridge) and the chorus works well with the repetitive opening.
Unfortunately I'm unfamiliar with the work of the band you sited, so I have a hard time getting a realistic picture of what this one sounds like. That's what makes lyrics hard to comment on in general. I find that a lot of people skip over the lyrics in favor of poetry or prose because of it.
jan
| Posted on 2005-05-05 00:00:00 | by jaycee | [ Reply to This ]


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