i relate to this (at least the depressed part, but i haven't done the whole open up to some1 thing) but i like that it is written in such simple wording. it really reflects the way a depressed person thinks and feels (@ least according to my experience w/ myself and others) as for flow... yea it was kinna off but i felt it added to the mood.
this is sad. how you are depressed then you find someone that makes you happy and they leave you. that really sucks. i like how this peice makes you think if you have ever done that to anyone or if it was done to you. sometimes the flow was off but thats ok. im sorry you had to go through that and i hope you find someone to make you happy again cherry