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    dots Submission Name: Powerlessdots
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    Author: closebutremote
    ASL Info:    22/M/FL
    Elite Ratio:    2.69 - 54/77/16
    Words: 109
    Class/Type: Story/Depressed
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    Bytes: 657



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       its sad people


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    dotsPowerlessdots
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    i wake up and see nothing
    i look out my window
    there is rain and failure
    i feel cold and irrational
    alone and powerless

    to feel this way was getting so old
    i decided to look into a soul
    i found something i been waiting for
    i thought, i've finally reached my goal

    you gesture kindly acknowledging my presence
    i open up to you
    you open up to me
    we are happy and fight off people coming between us

    then you move away
    so far i never see you and my days remain as they were before.

    you leave me little hope for recovery




    Submitted on 2005-04-26 16:27:37     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      James
    this is so beautiful and sad, I'm glad you came back and decided to grace us with your unique gift. I want to read more, dont leave me hanging
    love-sis
    | Posted on 2005-04-27 00:00:00 | by Forgiven | [ Reply to This ]
      I know how u feel. I get tired of waking up everyday knowing that everything is gonna be the same and that I am gonna have a bad day. But I really like your poem. Goodluck with your writing! byez!
    | Posted on 2005-04-27 00:00:00 | by Evie | [ Reply to This ]
      i relate to this (at least the depressed part, but i haven't done the whole open up to some1 thing) but i like that it is written in such simple wording. it really reflects the way a depressed person thinks and feels (@ least according to my experience w/ myself and others) as for flow... yea it was kinna off but i felt it added to the mood.
    | Posted on 2005-04-26 00:00:00 | by amateur | [ Reply to This ]
      this is sad. how you are depressed then you find someone that makes you happy and they leave you. that really sucks. i like how this peice makes you think if you have ever done that to anyone or if it was done to you. sometimes the flow was off but thats ok. im sorry you had to go through that and i hope you find someone to make you happy again
    cherry
    | Posted on 2005-04-26 00:00:00 | by cherrypie | [ Reply to This ]


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