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O Death how i yearn for thee

Author: darkness
ASL Info:    19/F/my own world
Elite Ratio:    1.84 - 524 /218 /40
Words: 56
Class/Type: Poetry /Death
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i was depressed when i rote this it came out stupid tho but now i feel better

O Death how i yearn for thee

Deep in the dungeons of death
My soul sleeps

the restless zombies of life
alive yet dead
in the land of the doomed

When death comes
least expectedly
when death comes
when death comes
when death comes

O Death sweet Death
How i yearn for thee......

Submitted on 2005-04-26 20:53:22     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  thanks for your noises bout my stuff...this, although short, is loaded with meaning! youve managed to get so much across and use so much imagery in a short poem is more than just a tallent!
| Posted on 2005-12-18 00:00:00 | by bambi144 | [ Reply to This ]
  i see nothing dealing with islam. weird. actually i liked this. could tell you were down and just wrote it to calm yourself. it wasnt that bad for something written without thinking. had the dark mood to it. with zombies and dungon scene. the title i didnt like. to common. simple. just a thought. lovely.

| Posted on 2005-05-01 00:00:00 | by poeticblindness | [ Reply to This ]
  omg omg omg! this poem was so good..i loved it so much!its so true how u put in about stuff from islam. i liked that a lot. great job...and reaad my poems! lol
| Posted on 2005-04-29 00:00:00 | by UnPerfect | [ Reply to This ]

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