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    dots Submission Name: King Krabbydots
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    Author: Epiphany
    ASL Info:    42/F/Universe
    Elite Ratio:    4.38 - 3342/2139/390
    Words: 98
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 604
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 702



    Description:
       OK - "i" watched "Deadliest Catch" on Discovery Channel ~ the "reality" show about the brave fishermen that bring us our yummy crab!

    A season that once yielded Tons of crab over months is now a 3-day season & it's a sleepless, treachorous 1/2 week! This may be a wake up call also for the new after-reality show..."There's too many darn people and not enough darn crab!"

    So, a light-hearted piece from epiphany ; > }

    Love, Peace, Joy!!!


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    dotsKing Krabbydots
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    Stalking stormy seas of the
    Bering Strait;
    Mean 'ol Cap'tn & Green
    First Mate!
    Stringing cages fresh with
    smelly bait...
    Season's on ~ pull that full
    crate!
    Three days of fishing seals our
    Fate...
    It's the bowls of hell or Heaven's
    gate!
    Please God let them be First
    rate....
    I owe a fine dinner to my fair
    date!
    Boy those crab is the finest we
    ate!
    Crabbin ~ a job to love a life to
    hate.
    Wanna eat through winter? Don't be
    late...
    the King Krabby's boat's leaving & he don't
    wait!




    Submitted on 2005-04-26 21:27:07     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Tiff, you've surpassed yourself, getting such a serious message across in such a light-hearted way, and I don't even know what the constant rhyme style is called, but I bet the Poetry Police have a name for it! LOL
    Excellent work
    Five Stars *****
    Be Happy (why do I bother saying that in your case?)
    Graeme
    | Posted on 2005-04-27 00:00:00 | by wewak11 | [ Reply to This ]
      This was a treat almost like a grownup nusery rhyme that I truly enjoyed! And I being a layman regarding poetry can't find one darn thing wrong with it lol I love the way you rhymed and does discovery channel have any idea what it series provoke in regards to poetry? LOL! This part... "Three days of fishing seals our Fate...It's the bowls of hell or Heaven's gate!" signifys the importance of these subjects quest because it is their livelyhood. Nice poem. `always write poetry, Cheryl.
    | Posted on 2005-04-27 00:00:00 | by ladyngold | [ Reply to This ]
      Lol, I don't know why, but when I saw the title I didn't read it as King Krabby, but as King Krabby Poo...:P My minds playing tricks on me :)...I like this po-em it was quite amusing even if I don't like crab (well, it's not really that I don't like them, it's just that they make my throat inflate and that sucks :P)

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    | Posted on 2005-04-27 00:00:00 | by Stwcjj | [ Reply to This ]
      This was funny and a nice ode to the old crabbers. Crab for dinner...mmmm...when, when, when...???

    Mean 'ol Cap'tn & Green
    First Mate

    Great line, as was:

    Crabbin ~ a job to love a life to
    hate.

    I think you did an excellent job goofy girl. No, no...esssssssquizzzz-it! I really enjoyed this one. You captured the hustle and bustle very well. Have a great one and keep writin' and smilin' and crabbin'
    | Posted on 2005-04-26 00:00:00 | by hyproglo | [ Reply to This ]


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