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    dots Submission Name: Dreams of the Daughterdots

    Author: DevilDinosaur
    ASL Info:    28/M/MR American
    Elite Ratio:    6.53 - 293/197/46
    Words: 124
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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       Um, something I wrote after reading "A Game of You" by Neil Gaimen. Ideally, the two poems would face each other on opposite pages (again, I know) but hey, whatcha gonna do?

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    dotsDreams of the Daughterdots

    Bright white linen dress
    For entertaining guests,
    The little girl
    May be oppressed,
    But those who know her cannot guess
    At the secret world
    That she has seen.
    It lives in her mind.
    It lives in her dreams...

    She dreams of the life
    She'll never know.
    Where the Prince and the people
    All love her so.
    There her father is king,
    And she, the loveliest girl
    Surrounded each day
    By beautiful things,
    In her perfect secret world.

    In a little girl's dreams
    She does not change,
    But the world
    In which she resides,
    Is replaced by another
    More perfect place
    Where she can go to hide.
    But one day, wakened from her dreams,
    She'll become a simple man's bride.

    Submitted on 2005-04-27 06:01:33     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Hmm... You are very talented.

    You know what would be neat? If the "simple man" turned out to be the "old woman's son."
    I don't have a reason though. I just like that idea lol

    I've never read "A Game of You." What is it? A book? A story? A poem? A song? A....
    Sorry lol I just got distracted and decided to dictionary.com the word "Soliloquy." Haha Where the hell is my mind these days?
    Now I I forget where I was going with that.

    Annnyway... I enjoyed this. I can't pick which one I like more. They're both awesome. (That's an understatement, but you'll have to blame my limited teenage vocabulary for that. Ooo no... wait... I have a thesaurus lol)
    They are extraordinary and tremendous.

    | Posted on 2006-08-27 00:00:00 | by Liv2LoveThePain | [ Reply to This ]
      Nice poem. To me it means that she is a dreamer. She wants what she doesn't have. But it's nice to have a dream world where you can escape from reality, and imagine whatever you feel like. I do it all the time.

    This was a great poem to read.

    | Posted on 2006-06-19 00:00:00 | by PiperH | [ Reply to This ]
      OK, this is a great companion piece to the "son" poem, and, whilst still pointing out the vagaries of life's reality, you let me down a bit easier here.
    I can't pick one as better that the other, perhaps you should just combine them...hey, it's lucky we have dreams, eh?
    Very nice work,
    Be Happy
    | Posted on 2005-05-02 00:00:00 | by wewak11 | [ Reply to This ]
      This poem is good. Like the way you told the of a women's childhood dreams of being rich and of royality and to live happily forever after. Most girls have these dreams and so few actually get to realize them. I visualized a little girl dressed in a flowing party dress just twiling because I remember doing the same so many times dreaming...happily without a doubt that what I was dreaming was going to come true as this girl is doing in your poem. The end wasn't depressing though hardly meeting the girls expectations which made this poem a pleasant read. I hate bad endings lol. To me "simple man" is fine as long as there is love. I enjoyed this much.
    `always write poetry, Cheryl.
    | Posted on 2005-04-27 00:00:00 | by ladyngold | [ Reply to This ]
      I am really surprised you got no views or comments on this. It's very good and says alot about little girls growing up and having to face the reality of life and marriage. Maybe everyone was sleeping when you posted. I think this is a very well-written poem that says more than is written. nice work.
    | Posted on 2005-04-27 00:00:00 | by sierramuse8 | [ Reply to This ]

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