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    dots Submission Name: Little Chocolate Bomberdots
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    Author: edthepoet
    ASL Info:    47-m-Pa
    Elite Ratio:    4.72 - 1476/991/125
    Words: 202
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 2572
    Average Vote:    1.0000
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    Description:
       This poem is about the West Berlin airlift after world war 2, A bomber pilot named, Gale Halverson walked to the fence and saw 30 kids and he had two sticks of gums and handed them to the kids to share and saw how just a little things could bring so much happiness, He told the kids to look for his plane and the white hanky's parachutes filled with candy. But he made the kids promise to share them.

    At the time, he could have been court marshalled for doing it. See the Russians had blockaded all food supply to the West German people, all 2 and half million people.

    After he was found out, just about every pilot started doing the same thing.

    If that wasn't great enough, Gale started dropping candy for the kids over East Germany as well.



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    Little chocolate bomber
    Little chocolate bomber
    Please fly over me
    and drop those white hankies filled with candy

    My house is the one with fallen walls and broken glass
    I know all the houses look the same from the sky
    However, mine is the one with red teddy bear on the roof

    I tried to run after the candy parachutes
    like the other kids
    But, my legs were bent crooked by the bombs
    As they promised you, they did share the
    chocolates and peppermint gum sticks with me and others

    Some enjoy the gum wrappers more than the chocolates
    While sniffing and savoring this never known smell before


    Little chocolate bomber
    Little chocolate bomber
    My parents still cant believe
    the Americans and the Brits have supported
    two and a half million people with food everyday
    for entire year now

    It may be freezing and snowing inside my room
    Yet, all I can think and dream about
    is chasing those floating candy chutes with my friends
    knowing someone thought about us kids



    Edward K. Deputy














    Submitted on 2005-04-27 09:24:29     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      What a load of rubbish. This seems like it was written in about 5 minutes (perhaps during the enslaught of a chocolate bomb; perhaps not). I'm sure you will appreciate this criticism as it is a wild departure from what you appear to be used to (i from people who don't seem to understand guideline 2). What would I have done differently? I would probably have used a few awkward rhymes and structure to make the feel of the poem less monotonous. More generally, I would actually have spent some time on it. Until today, I didn't think that it was possible that a war story could be boring? How wrong I was. The idea is nice, but the execution definitely has more of a wiff of The Sun about it than The Telegraph.
    | Posted on 2009-04-13 00:00:00 | by ChocSquelch | [ Reply to This ]
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    | Posted on 2009-04-13 00:00:00 | by ChocSquelch | [ Reply to This ]
      This is so original! It is such a hopeful piece, how the littlest of actions can affect someone deeply... Its kind of like the butterfly effect. but not quite. anyways, the only suggestion I have is in the lines:

    Some enjoy the gum wrappers more than the chocolates
    While sniffing and savoring this never known smell before

    Instead of having "never known" maybe put unknown? It seems a bit contridictory, but all in all I really enjoyed the story!
    I never knew about it, and now I do! I definitely learned something new today!
    -Ann
    | Posted on 2006-04-06 00:00:00 | by andrya | [ Reply to This ]
      ED- My friend- long time no see. Since you are the poet laurate or societies champion with your poetry I thought you might like my most recent piece. "Eulogy for the Forgotton" hope you like it

    your friend
    ben
    PS THIS WAS A WAY COOL PIECE I LOVED IT
    and thanks for the history lesson
    | Posted on 2005-07-29 00:00:00 | by BenCollier | [ Reply to This ]
      i wish someone would bomb me with a bunch of chocolates, i would die very happy! :) like that first part of the poem

    dylapoe's girl
    | Posted on 2005-07-24 00:00:00 | by dylanpoe | [ Reply to This ]
      A wonderful story this about Gale Halverson.. I am very surprised that so little is actaully known about him. Just shows what a modest man he was. Lovely to see how your poem developed from this. right up my street tonight. thank you.
    | Posted on 2005-05-23 00:00:00 | by Alter idem | [ Reply to This ]
      oh, that's beautiful Ed. I can just see and feel that kid being uplifted and made happy by the candy parachutes even though he couldn't get them himself. the dreams that sustain us! you have such a wonderful imagination!
    | Posted on 2005-05-07 00:00:00 | by sierramuse8 | [ Reply to This ]
      Written through the eyes of innocence... how difficult is that... and you pulled it off masterfully. I can only imagine the hopeful joy those kids must have felt knowing someone was thinking of them and showing it with such a grand gesture. You've done a brilliant job in portraying the innocence through your images. Very well written!
    | Posted on 2005-05-01 00:00:00 | by Beulah | [ Reply to This ]
      it was refreshing to find such beauty and kindness in the midst of such horror and desolation. i vaguely remember hearing about this a long time ago and it so heartwarming. thank you for sharing this in your own poetic way Ed.

    on a side note, the chocolate bomber made me think of when i drive my FedEx truck which has a doggie on the side. i think all the doggies i meet think it's full of bones just for them 'cause i always carry bones in my pocket for the doggies i meet.
    | Posted on 2005-04-30 00:00:00 | by magnicat | [ Reply to This ]
      wow, i never knew this before. maybe we'll get to it in history class when we start on world war II...

    just when i was starting to lose faith in humankind, i read something like this and all my faith is restored. it just goes to show that there are good people left in the world. how unselfish of that pilot! to risk being court marshalled to feed these kids? that is so... well, what's the word i'm looking for? noble... humble... honorable... ah, i can't find a good word. i agree with Pain, what is the significance of the red teddy bear? writing this from one of the children's point of view, i think you really helped capture just how much that simple (kind of) act of kindness helped so many people. now i'm rambling, but this was absolutely incredible. it always warms my heart to read your poems...

    XoXo
    ~TaY~
    | Posted on 2005-04-30 00:00:00 | by Phoenix2004 | [ Reply to This ]
      I like how you took a devastating situation and turned it into something heart warming. May everybody dream candy falling from the sky in times of grieve misfortune.
    Rubi
    | Posted on 2005-04-29 00:00:00 | by Rubi_Roja | [ Reply to This ]
      WOW! Not only did you teach me something...you also gave me a great feeling.

    Children can be satisfied so easily. And the hearts of these pilots are still soaring through the air and forever will. You are always so inspirational. You are one of Elite's greatest.

    *sings*

    Always and foreverrrrrrr...

    LMFOA

    Much love oh bratty sassy one!

    Alicia
    | Posted on 2005-04-29 00:00:00 | by Munchie_1226 | [ Reply to This ]
      hmmmm, I had never heard that before...the candy airlift :)...un uplifting piece I must say :) It's amazing how a little piece of kindness can go along way :)

    STW
    | Posted on 2005-04-28 00:00:00 | by Stwcjj | [ Reply to This ]
      that really made my day... most peole do need to be reminded of the little good in this world and a sense of faith in humanity...this write was innocent and appealing .i really like it when the cuteness of this piece and its depth come together to let u say."now that was nice".
    thanks ed.
    | Posted on 2005-04-28 00:00:00 | by k kin | [ Reply to This ]
      This was wonderful Ed, down to the child speaking broken English. It was such a great gesture for these poor children, something for them to look forward to, other then the bombings and death all around them. Glad to see you back again.
    Carol
    | Posted on 2005-04-27 00:00:00 | by wannabe1 | [ Reply to This ]
      Hey there. Long time no talk. How ya doin'? Good I hope.

    I adore this piece. I had heard in one of my previous history classes about how the bombers dropped candy for the kids. The whole thing is one of of the sweetest gestures I've heard of.

    You did a great job with this ed. There's some type-o's in there. But other than that, this piece is just adorable. It's got an innocence to it that just makes it stand out.

    Anyhoo...much love to ya.
    | Posted on 2005-04-27 00:00:00 | by Juliets_dagger | [ Reply to This ]
      Nice different piece...Ver much unique. As always, you do the damn thang with ease. I liked how you had the kids describing their homes for the candy drop. Another good one Ed.



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    | Posted on 2005-04-27 00:00:00 | by xtremegentleman | [ Reply to This ]
      awwwww that's so sweet, pardon the pun. You did really well this piece, it's so cute.
    Hmmm only I read too much into things and I wonder what is the signifigance of a *red* teddy bear
    >As they promise you<
    Should that be promised? I think maybe...
    Anyway, very nice ed. I like it like that!
    LoL. Keep Writing
    ~Caribou~
    | Posted on 2005-04-27 00:00:00 | by painofthanatos | [ Reply to This ]
      ed, thats so sweet...what a touching story! its nice to see a poem based on the not so typical. i like the way it was written by the child's Point of view. it adds to the mood, and hopeful tone. nice piece ed

    -Nikki
    | Posted on 2005-04-27 00:00:00 | by stolie77 | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a very heart-touching piece. I like how you brought the story out through the eyes of a child. The chocolate bomber.. a hero to so many kids. We should have more like him around. You did good in honoring him and those like him with this lovely poem. An enjoyable read.
    ~Sandra
    | Posted on 2005-04-27 00:00:00 | by Intricate1 | [ Reply to This ]
      Hey Ed,

    I really liked this one. The innocense of the child speaking is quite heartbreaking. It made me cry. I have never before heard of the man you were writing about, and I thank you for the little bit of history.
    | Posted on 2005-06-08 00:00:00 | by ebflannery | [ Reply to This ]


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