Hey girl, I am SO sorry I havent been around lately. Life has been hectic, and will continue to be, but all should calm down by summer:O) Anyway, enough of my excuses.
I have commented only once aon a haiku before, and it was because it caught my eye and was beautiful in every way. And this my friend, is VERY similiar to the only other haiku I've ever commented on. This is beautiful, and expresses something so simple in such a, excuse the lame term, naturey way. And it is for this reason that I like the title. if you were trying to take something common and exaplin it in pure beauty. However, if you just titled it this after the haiku itself, then it seems less meaningful.
Wait wait wait, this is coming out wrong. I feel like I'm sounding horribly mean about it. Ok. I liked your haiku very much, but I think the title doesnt describe it well enough. The only way I think the title would describe it beautifully is if yuowere taking some common phrase, "pink" and writing a beautiful story behind it. Get what I mean? I hope so.
Sorry I think I've jsut wasted a couple minuts of your life on this comment:O/ Overall excellent job Secret!
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This is a nice little piece. It has meaning, even though it's abstract (all haikus are, really). I like it. However, why pink? Not that I can't see it, but most people tend to associate sunlight and dawn with gold and yellow.
You do not see many haikus on this site nowadays. It is nice to see someone write one. I understand that you must follow the 5-7-5 format for haikus, but you probably should find another word other than "pinkness". Look into a thesaurus and see what you can find. Other than that, this was a solid, descriptive piece. Nice work
wow i think this was great for a haiku. i also havent really tried that much to write a haiku and im not very good at it. but i think im going to start trying those. this kind of reminded me of a nice spring day for some reason and i liked it.:-)