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    dots Submission Name: untitleddots

    Author: Darkwarrior
    ASL Info:    27
    Elite Ratio:    3.51 - 60/63/33
    Words: 67
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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        this came to my mind its a bit piecey not one of my bests but its worth another blank page

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    Clouds hang in the distance
    full of rain
    to drown me again
    summer showers
    spring storms
    winter's bliss
    cause me harm
    upon anticipation
    guide across my dreams
    squashing them endlessly
    my hopes about the sky
    come and go
    live then die
    all about with the birds
    singing a melody
    I once heard
    long before
    I had dreams
    that soared
    above everything

    Submitted on 2005-04-27 13:32:15     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      analytical and nonsensical but paints a perfect picture with the canges in weather and seasons creams remain the same and soar above nature a true ambitous fault good write
    | Posted on 2005-04-27 00:00:00 | by Rennes | [ Reply to This ]
      This poem is great. All you need is a title and your all set. The metaphors in this poem really set up the atmosphere of this poem. it shows true pain and sadness and has a lot of meaning to it. keep it up.
    | Posted on 2005-04-27 00:00:00 | by Saint | [ Reply to This ]

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