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    dots Submission Name: Old Willow Treedots
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    Author: Darkwarrior
    ASL Info:    27
    Elite Ratio:    3.51 - 60/63/33
    Words: 76
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    Description:
       this came to mind a few night b4 im trying new ways of writing deep huh


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    dotsOld Willow Treedots
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    writings on the door
    showing signs of welcome
    but the knob will not turn
    because it is locked
    many windows reside this house
    but all are closed
    shades drawn
    flowers grow in abundance
    but only last a few seconds
    as they quickly die
    shun from all sunlight
    because the old willow tree
    hangs over the yard
    its the only known living thing
    dwelling this home
    but it cuts off life
    from the rest of the world




    Submitted on 2005-04-27 13:39:40     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      it's always good to try and explore new things, it shows potential, but i don't feel that the structure quite fits, play with it a little i think if done right it could be really well read
    | Posted on 2005-05-04 00:00:00 | by dismentled | [ Reply to This ]


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