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    dots Submission Name: epiph a koo ~ bless u!dots
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    Author: Epiphany
    ASL Info:    42/F/Universe
    Elite Ratio:    4.38 - 3342/2139/390
    Words: 10
    Class/Type: Haiku/Love
    Total Views: 751
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 76



    Description:
       <@> always forget what the syllable count is for haikus & such (i am not prone to following poetic rulez)?
    We have a lovely mini-pond in front of my office & "i" luv watching the birds come and play and fluff their feathers in the waterfall.

    Just a lunch quickie.....Happy Administrative Assistant day to all those secretaries & such! Love, Peace, Joy!!!


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    dotsepiph a koo ~ bless u!dots
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    beautiful black bird
    bathing in baby bluez
    bolting back beyond




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      Tiff now this mini poem, that is what I will call it is refreshing in thought but Tiff as an actual haiku it is a flop lol ...why did you post it as a haiku? To be acceptable it must conform to the 5-7-5 syllable count but on the positive side you did adhere to the nature theme and that is a start...and personally I believe because of the briefness of haiku spelling has to also be so boring in otherwise spelled correctly lol. Tiff, keep writing poetry, Love Cheryl
    | Posted on 2005-04-30 00:00:00 | by ladyngold | [ Reply to This ]
      I can just see a blackbird dashing down to bathe, then quickly bolting away.. love the alliterations. Makes me want to come up with my own (like wewak) .. but I'll refrain and just say this was lovely.
    By the rules, which I say dump (lol) ...it's a 5-7-5.
    I say, there should be no rules in poetry. Read mine and you can tell why...LOL.
    A lovely piece.
    ~Sandra
    | Posted on 2005-04-28 00:00:00 | by Intricate1 | [ Reply to This ]
      When I saw the title I was tempted to hand you a Kleenex :P...I just hope you didn't have a runny nose while writing this...(that can always bee deadly :P) Ok for a haiku, even though I don't usually like reading them LOL,...don't even know why :P But thanks for sharing :)

    STW
    | Posted on 2005-04-27 00:00:00 | by Stwcjj | [ Reply to This ]
      Well, haikus (bless U) are supposed to be about nature and this one was. An itty bitty black bird (yes, they are beautiful, kind of like how nobody but us seem to see the beauty in seagulls either) bathing and drinking in your pond at work and then darting off. Pure nature to me my dear. Nice job. People seem to be too "grounded" to appreciate the free flying spirits, ya know? Either that or they let their wings be clipped...and clipped...and clipped.
    Have a grrrrrrrrrRRRRRR8 one and keep smilin'
    DAVE
    | Posted on 2005-04-27 00:00:00 | by hyproglo | [ Reply to This ]
      Uh...yeah...it basically was a fly-free thing? Well, I have heard it all before...It sounded nice, though. No real meaning behind it that I could detect, but, um, for a lunch thing, well, if I were you Ida just written a straight out poem to get your meaning out.
    | Posted on 2005-04-27 00:00:00 | by wordslinger | [ Reply to This ]
      Hey Tiff, gezundheit! (if that's how U spell it)
    Laughing loudly at letters aliterated, lovely! Looks like I'm leaving, lost the little lunacy I had. Luckily I left it lounging on my lawn.
    Later,
    Laeme
    | Posted on 2005-04-27 00:00:00 | by wewak11 | [ Reply to This ]
      Sounds like you were bored and been having fun at work... not saying that it is bad or anuthign but i mean i do like a lot of haikus... btw it is 5-8-5. but anyway i have to go... *atschool* THNX

    - Nammy
    | Posted on 2005-04-27 00:00:00 | by Namlooc20 | [ Reply to This ]


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