Description: <@> always forget what the syllable count is for haikus & such (i am not prone to following poetic rulez)?
We have a lovely mini-pond in front of my office & "i" luv watching the birds come and play and fluff their feathers in the waterfall.
Just a lunch quickie.....Happy Administrative Assistant day to all those secretaries & such! Love, Peace, Joy!!!
epiph a koo ~ bless u! -------------------------------------------
beautiful black bird
bathing in baby bluez
bolting back beyond
Tiff now this mini poem, that is what I will call it is refreshing in thought but Tiff as an actual haiku it is a flop lol ...why did you post it as a haiku? To be acceptable it must conform to the 5-7-5 syllable count but on the positive side you did adhere to the nature theme and that is a start...and personally I believe because of the briefness of haiku spelling has to also be so boring in otherwise spelled correctly lol. Tiff, keep writing poetry, Love Cheryl
I can just see a blackbird dashing down to bathe, then quickly bolting away.. love the alliterations. Makes me want to come up with my own (like wewak) .. but I'll refrain and just say this was lovely. By the rules, which I say dump (lol) ...it's a 5-7-5. I say, there should be no rules in poetry. Read mine and you can tell why...LOL. A lovely piece. ~Sandra
When I saw the title I was tempted to hand you a Kleenex :P...I just hope you didn't have a runny nose while writing this...(that can always bee deadly :P) Ok for a haiku, even though I don't usually like reading them LOL,...don't even know why :P But thanks for sharing :)
Well, haikus (bless U) are supposed to be about nature and this one was. An itty bitty black bird (yes, they are beautiful, kind of like how nobody but us seem to see the beauty in seagulls either) bathing and drinking in your pond at work and then darting off. Pure nature to me my dear. Nice job. People seem to be too "grounded" to appreciate the free flying spirits, ya know? Either that or they let their wings be clipped...and clipped...and clipped. Have a grrrrrrrrrRRRRRR8 one and keep smilin' DAVE
Uh...yeah...it basically was a fly-free thing? Well, I have heard it all before...It sounded nice, though. No real meaning behind it that I could detect, but, um, for a lunch thing, well, if I were you Ida just written a straight out poem to get your meaning out.
Hey Tiff, gezundheit! (if that's how U spell it) Laughing loudly at letters aliterated, lovely! Looks like I'm leaving, lost the little lunacy I had. Luckily I left it lounging on my lawn. Later, Laeme