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    dots Submission Name: Rickydots
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    Author: secret kisses
    ASL Info:    22/f/uk
    Elite Ratio:    2.81 - 558/438/138
    Words: 81
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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       i wrote this for my boyfriend ricky (my muse) x x x x


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    dotsRickydots
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    you touched me for the first time,
    which made my legs go weak,
    you said those words i longed to hear,
    the ones that can't speak.

    you kissed me whilst i was sleeping,
    but i was realy awake,
    you held me close to your body,
    which made me feel real safe.

    everytime we are apart,
    i can't help but think of you,
    your smiling face, and warm embrace,
    you make me feel brand new. x x x




    Submitted on 2005-04-28 12:06:04     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      omg i didnt know u wrote a poem on him, i know it was all sweet in the begging, but girl i knew you could always do beta, nice write tho,
    shae
    x x x
    | Posted on 2006-05-10 00:00:00 | by shae_indauk | [ Reply to This ]
      Sweet, boys are awesome sometims and sometimes they are evil things and they need to be spanked...which is what we are for! Hee hee. I love some boyzz sometimes.
    | Posted on 2006-02-10 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]
      awwww this makes me feel awesome thi one if there is one sure way to a mans heart it to appreciate him for the little things that he does and i could definately feel the appreciation and love in this piece awesome stuff i absolutely have nothing but praise for every piece that i have read of yours well done

    Timmy S. Edgar
    | Posted on 2005-12-09 00:00:00 | by Timmy S. Edgar | [ Reply to This ]
      i like the way the poem moves i don't know if you tryed to ryhme but seemed that in some of the lines that is what happened i would say in all you have good skills but in the future wacth how you rythme flows and what words flow together this will help with the rythme
    | Posted on 2005-04-28 00:00:00 | by DonKB | [ Reply to This ]


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