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Author: SmoothePapa
ASL Info:    24/m/FL
Elite Ratio:    2.65 - 55 /90 /16
Words: 219
Class/Type: Rant /Angry
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There is a difference between critiqueing and straighout disrespecting someones work. I would never say someones work is stupid. Everyone on here puts a lot of thought and time into their work. I may say someones work is confusing. And My work may not make sense to someone else. But no ones work is stupid. So retaliation is a must. Those are the rules I live by.


So you got so much to say,
but know nothing at all.
You're an atheist mother [f*#@**]
who nuts..
just got too tall.
Let me pause..
in between my thoughts
while tearing you down.
You say a prophet
can only speak the Lord's name.
Well,I'm speaking now.
And how..can you comment
on anything that speaks of religion.
You're an atheist..
Did you forget?
You don't have a religion.
By the way.
Is a contradictory statement.
Sort of like..
Saying you don't eat meat,
but sneak down..
to eat it in the basement.
You're spiritually racist..
Morally rundown.
If you were music..
There would be no sound.
You're the type that gets married
and still try to mess around.
Poor background..
Yes I'd say..
Your life story..
(A Big Mistake)
Why mix thoughts with my brain?
It's an Ocean..
Your brain..
Is still a lake.
Yall this is rape,
and it shall continue.
Take a look at these stats.
Stuff submitted:47
Only two had ten comments.
What's that?
You'd better relax
with your statements
or feel the wrath of my pen.
And if you're smart..
You shouldn't start..
To calculate your revenge.
I'll win..Silly rabbit
Then we can do it again
Until death do us part..
With a leathal heart..
I say..
We aint friends.


Submitted on 2005-04-28 13:37:45     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Ok some parts I thought was a little to forced. But I can see it was a rant, and you can see the tension in this. Some parts of me just said I didn't like this rant. But other parts of me said it was ok. Not the best. but if this is the way you get your feelings out, than I hope it works.

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| Posted on 2005-05-22 00:00:00 | by XxStephyxX04 | [ Reply to This ]
  Ok...I'm sorry I can't say i liked this at all. I think this is the first time i said this to anyone. This is just plain disrespect and rude. First of all paradox is just the persons screenname. It is a part of literature. Writting is literature so maybe they thought of doing that i don't know...but there is no reason to critisise it. Your talking about this person dissing you and now that is all your doing to this person. Ok...3....if someone is ateist that is none of your business what so ever. I mean i know atheist people and they can be the nicest people you could ever meet. Just because they don't belive in something that you do doesn't mean that they are horrible...i mean so what. There is really no need for any of this. I mean I got remarks that i didn't like on some of my writtings but maybe they were true. I looked the stuff over and yes sometiems they do have the point...that my writting did make scence or it was just plain stupid. Sweetie it is called freedom of speech and you have to get over it. You can't crisize this person for doing something when your just doing the same thing right back...i'm really sorry if this seemed harsh at all...but someone had to say it. I guess it had to be me. I'm sorry if i did come off on the wrong foot.

| Posted on 2005-05-15 00:00:00 | by MiKkI25 | [ Reply to This ] me...made no sense what-so-ever! No rhythm could be grasped onto at all. And the words just didn't flow well together. Sounds like you got too excited and didn't really put much thought into this piece. I am not really diggin this one. Not at all. I apologize, but I'm just keepin it treal!

And I think...everyone is entitled to their own beliefs and own opinion. Sorry.

Li Li
| Posted on 2005-05-04 00:00:00 | by Munchie_1226 | [ Reply to This ]
  There were parts in here that made me lol *whispers* especially the part bout the nutts gettin too tall nothing like a classic clown on the "you bit off more then you can chew" line...

But I have to say there were too many typo's for this to be considered flawless. Which isn't bad typo's are something that I'm aiming for in my writes lol hey they are better then just pure ignorance...typo's can be fixed...ignorance...weeeelll your just stuck with that, there aint no hope lol

I guess I still have to read more of your writes I'm not able to catch the flow that you have in your head while writing so for me when I read some of them it kind of feels like my muse is in the passenger side and the driver is learning how to drive standard... we all have our own rhythm and since you haven't posted that many pieces it's just gon take me a bit to "one two step" wit you ...
| Posted on 2005-04-28 00:00:00 | by Brownsdelight | [ Reply to This ]
  That's how you rip them [censored]s! Hey, this is exactly what I was talking about in my journal. I had to lay it out for them and let them know that it is just business. I ripped PARADOX too. Left it on his page! I was just bull[censored]ting though! Good [censored] though!

| Posted on 2005-04-28 00:00:00 | by xtremegentleman | [ Reply to This ]

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