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    dots Submission Name: Immigrant Facedots
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    Author: cuddledumplin
    ASL Info:    36/ f/UK
    Elite Ratio:    4.08 - 6269/5927/526
    Words: 77
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    Description:
       This is based on what a friend of mine said it was like visiting her ancestral home in China. I put myself in her place though.


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    dotsImmigrant Facedots
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    I have an immigrant face.
    In two generations,
    it has not lost the charm of the old world
    or gained that new world look.
    I still have a stout peasant body;
    I'm a clone of my great-grandmother:
    her pointed nose and chin,
    her deep-set, dark eyes
    her dark, wavy mane,
    and now as I revisit her home
    and walk in her footsteps,
    I nearly drown in nostalgia
    as though I'd lived her life.






    Submitted on 2004-04-05 00:01:14     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Nothin wrong here, I guess, but it's so darn personal. I kinda like it, but I can't relate. I do, though, or rather have thought about myself with respect to the presence of my ancestry in my appearance. I'm mostly Swiss German, with a good bit of Welsch and Cherokee. Like you care.
    | Posted on 2004-06-07 00:00:00 | by Black Rock Tractor | [ Reply to This ]
      This is beautiful in the thoughts it provokes in all its readers, the way you wonder about those that came before you, establishing your family, and with that values, beliefs etc. The words are simple and add to the strength of the piece, very well written.
    | Posted on 2004-04-05 00:00:00 | by Transcendancing | [ Reply to This ]
      the topic is lovely; blood history. intriguing. suggestion: perhaps end the poem with more of a original spin, in the same way it began; "and step into her life". or something. hope that helps. good job! =]

    ~Blue
    | Posted on 2004-04-05 00:00:00 | by blueorchids | [ Reply to This ]


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