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Directions To Love

Author: SmoothePapa
ASL Info:    24/m/FL
Elite Ratio:    2.65 - 55 /90 /16
Words: 114
Class/Type: Poetry /Love
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Directions To Love

You want directions to Love..
Then make a right turn,
and continue down the street
called passion that burns.
Once you have passed passion
make a quick left,
and you'll see a small sign saying;
Commitment not wealth.
Keep straight on commitment
on down to honesty.
Make a right on emotions,
and you'll see trust me.
Continue on trust
until you see a second light
Make a U-turn
and jealousy is on your right.
Ride through jealousy,
and also through polite.
Turn on curtesy,
and generous is next in sight.
You see that intersection;
Just beyond that is one light.
That light is called the light of Love
Since Love is in your sight.

Submitted on 2005-04-28 14:13:25     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  if only finding love was as easy as following these simple directions and as smooth as the journey and flow of your poem . . . Exceptionally well written
| Posted on 2005-05-23 00:00:00 | by AfricanPrincess | [ Reply to This ]
  This is very easy to read which makes people forget how difficult something of this calibur is to write. The names of the streets, which way to turn ...all of it seems to be intricately thoughht out. Another great write of course. That's how the Collier Boys do it! I'm in warfare over here in my Elite world. I really need these directions.

| Posted on 2005-04-28 00:00:00 | by xtremegentleman | [ Reply to This ]
  I didnt take time to read the other comments if I repeat something sorry... :D

this was beautiful and I was right on the stop and go for me :D

hmmmm now I wonder if you can program this with Onstar...the male version lol ;)
| Posted on 2005-04-28 00:00:00 | by Brownsdelight | [ Reply to This ]
  wow this was nice. me, i can't follow directions worth a damn, but i think this may be the first time i don't end up lost... ooh, i feel all tingly and warm now...
| Posted on 2005-04-28 00:00:00 | by Phoenix2004 | [ Reply to This ]
  this was great very well thoughtout i would say
all the pleasures and treasures of love when love is good imagine writing one in dark form or of a really scorned love hope got ya thinking i no i am maybe post it some day
| Posted on 2005-04-28 00:00:00 | by sandman | [ Reply to This ]
  I think that is beautiful and even as directionaly challenged as I am I think I could find my way,lol. I really thought this was great, you did a wonderful job, and it made me happy to read it.
Thank you
| Posted on 2005-04-28 00:00:00 | by Forgiven | [ Reply to This ]
  That is a really great poem. It's kind of cheesy to the first read but it's really cute. The flow of the whole thing is really good and gives me a warm feeling inside. You should get that on a hallmark card or something. Good write
| Posted on 2005-04-28 00:00:00 | by ashlee_jane2003 | [ Reply to This ]

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