The "ya" has got to go and even though it was repitious, I kinda liked it. If you could straighten out the grammer a bit, it could be a lot better. It's kinda sad how important it is to some kids to be popular when all you need is one or two really close friends to make your life complete. Having parents that care helps too.
This was not very deep at all, and seemed to lack a lot of thought. I do not really like it when slang is used in poems, like "ya"..it takes away from any beauty that is there. Not to mention there were numerous spelling mistakes that took my mind off the poem. You really have to fix those.
It felt a little bit too repetitive at times, even though you are just stressing the message you are giving. I think you should definitely revise this, because it is an interesting concept, but you just went about it in a, well, bad way...I am just giving an honest opinion.
This was alrightI I mean agree with angelfyre it wasn't that deep.I don't like how you used ya instead of you it seems to wreck the poem. I hope to re do this i don't mean to so mean. hope to hear from you. keep writing.
Well... Yes.haha This was ok, not really too deep. the message behind it was. you must be a poet...not becoming popular until after death. that's the way it works though...right? You should watch your spelling. It's sketchy.lol. The repitition also is a little bit much. It's good sometimes, but you may have gone overboard.lol