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    dots Submission Name: my broken smile (revised)dots
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    Author: brokensmile
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    dotsmy broken smile (revised)dots
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    Out of foolishness
    i left my smile shining
    almost abandoned
    vunerable
    to those i did not trust
    and when things are carelessly
    left out
    they are rained on
    and in response they rust








    Submitted on 2005-04-28 16:01:33     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Wow this is a great poem it seems you are very sad and you just want to be happy. I know how you feel I go through it too , don't worry you'll find you smile and you happiness . great poem and flow you could use capital letters in some parts of the poem but overall great
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    | Posted on 2005-04-28 00:00:00 | by Fallen_Rose22 | [ Reply to This ]


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