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    dots Submission Name: FUCK YOUdots
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    Author: Gravitic
    ASL Info:    20/m/tn
    Elite Ratio:    4.04 - 28/30/8
    Words: 156
    Class/Type: Poetry/Venting
    Total Views: 536
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       I wrote this for my ex...just believe me when I tell you that it was not a good time in my life...she pissed me off more than anyone had ever done and this was for her


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    dotsFUCK YOUdots
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    You liar!
    You thief!
    You took my heart and you made it break!
    You bastard!
    You piece of shit!
    I thought you cared a little bit!
    You stupid asshole!
    You stupid fuck!
    You left me standing here alone like a sitting duck!
    I look into your eyes and all I feel is the hate.
    I have two feelings that I could debate.
    I can't be mad at you when you talk to me
    But, underneath all the shit, I can see.
    You don't care about me.
    You never did.
    Don't lie to me...
    I never meant anything to you!
    Well, you know what? Fuck you too!
    Stop fucking with my mind
    You are seriously running out of time
    You made me do the thing I do best.
    You made me hurt myself and everyone else.
    I could just hang my self from a rope made of felt.
    You wouldn’t fucking care would you?!
    Whatever...fuck you too!




    Submitted on 2005-04-28 21:48:00     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      it was pretty good and i hope you get over it soon so you don't hurt anyone lol. make sure you write in a better sence. it is very unique and shows alot of emotion.
    | Posted on 2005-05-01 00:00:00 | by tickles8 | [ Reply to This ]
      Alright I rolled over and give in.
    You know the title.
    I hate [censored] like that. And I swore I wouldn't look.
    But I did and...
    Better than I thought. Given the Fu**ed title.
    | Posted on 2005-04-28 00:00:00 | by childs | [ Reply to This ]
      wow get it out my man there is nothing worse for your heart than to hold it in let it out
    you'll feel a better god bless you need alot of prayers
    | Posted on 2005-04-28 00:00:00 | by littlepoet | [ Reply to This ]
      Breathe. In through your nose and out your mouth. Think of birds flying and pretty waterfalls. Sorry, that might just piss you off more. The poem was to the point but the structure was way off and the rhyming was pretty bad. But hey, good luck.
    | Posted on 2005-04-28 00:00:00 | by Jessa | [ Reply to This ]
      Um... wow I liked it but it seems like you didn't put a lot of thought or time into this peice But I definently felt the anger lol. I did like the fact that you didn't really try to rhyme after every other line or so. If you did that It would have really ruined the whole flow of it. Loved it!
    | Posted on 2005-04-28 00:00:00 | by Coffee Brake | [ Reply to This ]


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