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    dots Submission Name: Color Growsdots
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    Author: cuddledumplin
    ASL Info:    36/ f/UK
    Elite Ratio:    4.08 - 6269/5927/526
    Words: 27
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsColor Growsdots
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    Color grows
    as my sleepy eyes
    creak open
    like a rusty-hinged door.
    Each new day
    brings a new canvas
    qucikly and beautifully painted
    before my eyes.




    Submitted on 2004-04-05 02:46:02     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is marvelous....I like how the sleepy eyes creak open and that each day begins a new canvas. What a wonderful notion.
    | Posted on 2004-04-05 00:00:00 | by angela~ | [ Reply to This ]
      Very, very vivid, I like the line 'Creak open
    Like a rusty-hinged door'... very fresh and colorful... as it should be. I feel it - good piece!
    | Posted on 2004-04-05 00:00:00 | by Nightraven | [ Reply to This ]
      Oh, I like this. Although, I think maybe creak combined with rusty gives a cliché feel. Can you substitute something?
    | Posted on 2004-04-05 00:00:00 | by boompatah | [ Reply to This ]
      What a lovely poem and what a lovely picture.
    They say that if you like pate, you should never meet the goose.
    And of course if you like the poem, you should never meet the poet.
    And, of course, you have overturned these truisms with one picture and one poem.
    What a lovely goose and what a lovely poem!
    Torie.
    | Posted on 2004-04-05 00:00:00 | by Torie | [ Reply to This ]
      I have read something like this before, about when you awake, its like a fresh new piece of canvas, waiting to be painted on. It gives wonderful images, Excellent work!
    | Posted on 2004-04-05 00:00:00 | by ViCiOuSWrItEr | [ Reply to This ]


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