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    dots Submission Name: What's the use?dots

    Author: Siren Mengana
    ASL Info:    18-f-NE Oklahoma
    Elite Ratio:    2.7 - 186/253/78
    Words: 33
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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       This is about, of course, some guy that I love that couldn't see the truth if it bit him square in the ass...alas, oh well............

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    dotsWhat's the use?dots

    What's the use
    of loving that boy?
    He's so far away,
    and out of my reach
    in so many ways.
    He still doesn't see,
    after all these months,
    how much I love him

    Submitted on 2005-04-29 05:41:07     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this is short but semi-powerful. it is not the best work that i have seen but it is not the worst either. so whatever you take that point as...
    | Posted on 2005-12-12 00:00:00 | by buffaloman | [ Reply to This ]
      Poetry is how you express your feelings, nothing more. Some people can relate, and of course, some, all they care to do is pick apart everything you put down into words. I myself can relate to how you're feeling in this piece, I wish it had more length, and gone into more detail about your feelings, but even with the shortness, I can still get the jist of how you were feeling. It's a good piece all in all. Good job.
    | Posted on 2005-05-02 00:00:00 | by SouthrnQT | [ Reply to This ]
      And now I have to think more. What if this person that you are referring to really does realize the full extent of your love for him? Perhaps he knows more than he lets on? I know of women who are capable of being this mysterious and I too have been known not to be so giving of my knowledge when it seems very irrelevant. But now you may wonder, why would I consider love irrelevant? Well, it isn't, to tell the truth, but still, one cannot say everything he knows just as one cannot express everything he or she feels.
    | Posted on 2005-05-01 00:00:00 | by Kenji Light | [ Reply to This ]
      It's o.k. you'll catch on after a while. Just a little more detail to this one and it could be pretty good. Even I have some poems that need plenty of work but that's what writing is all about;getting better.
    | Posted on 2005-04-29 00:00:00 | by SmoothePapa | [ Reply to This ]
      looks more like a journal entry or a conversation with your best friend..not a poem.but,heyy it's all about expressing yourself.good work.cannot term this as poem, i am sure others may like this :) try working on the flow,the words(it's too simple now) and it's too short too..and about that boy..good luck!..i am sure there's someone around the corner who likes you big time..so, move on girl! :)
    | Posted on 2005-04-29 00:00:00 | by vedanta19 | [ Reply to This ]

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