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    dots Submission Name: Ice In His Eyesdots
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    Author: Raivn
    ASL Info:    33/f/al
    Elite Ratio:    4.28 - 1222/916/231
    Words: 188
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
    Total Views: 776
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    Bytes: 1199



    Description:
       Conversation between me and my ex boyfriend.


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    dotsIce In His Eyesdots
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    "Let's be friends," she said
    And to that, he agreed
    It seemed a way to keep her from breaking down
    In her time of desperate need
    "Let's hang out," she said
    He mumbled an excuse
    Her temper flared at his dishonesty,
    But she offered up a truce
    "I miss you so, so much," she said
    "And I love you still."
    He just shrugged and the ice in his eyes
    Gave her heart a chill.
    "We could have made it work," she said
    He said he was tired of trying
    She tried to keep his words away
    From the part of her that was crying.
    "Will I get another chance?" she asked
    He said he didn't know
    She longed to be in his arms again
    Where her love could always grow
    "Are you happy now?" she asked
    He replied that yes, he was
    She could see it in his smile
    And the stubborn demeanor that would not budge
    "Am I so easy to let go?" she asked
    Hoping the ice in his heart would crack
    He just shrugged and looked away
    She knew he was never coming back




    Submitted on 2005-04-29 23:44:22     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this is sad sad sad....ice never cracks, just melts little by little, and then you still have chunks in your water
    ya know?

    "He replied that yes, he was
    She could see it in his smile"
    i know what happens when you see that look
    makes you want to cry and stuff
    awww

    "Let's be friends," she said
    And to that, he agreed
    It seemed a way to keep her from breaking down
    In her time of desperate need
    i love this section...it makes me wonder, you know
    but then i think i know, so i dont know
    ah well
    my favorite part
    xoxo
    | Posted on 2007-09-10 00:00:00 | by blu_kittin | [ Reply to This ]
      wow.. this struck a cord deep down for me.. ive been there b4 n it sucks cuz u wna hold them so tight but all they wna do is get away.. its well written n i rely like it i hope everything gets better for u <3 ash
    | Posted on 2005-07-16 00:00:00 | by scardnscared | [ Reply to This ]
      Thank you, I think. Well, yes. It was pure emotion. It was just looking into someone's eyes that you loved so completely and seeing nothing there.But, thank you. Your words mean a lot to me.
    | Posted on 2005-07-08 00:00:00 | by Raivn | [ Reply to This ]
      I think the right word is "beautifully young."

    It's one of those pieces that could have been written by anyone of any age bracket and touches you for a few seconds then let's you go.

    Its narrative form shows how the piece rides on pure unfabricated emotion.

    The last line has been said in many times in many ways but, apparently, is still effective.

    Fairly played.
    | Posted on 2005-04-30 00:00:00 | by ANGELO | [ Reply to This ]


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