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Author: mimi
ASL Info:    30/f/ny
Elite Ratio:    3.66 - 597 /390 /111
Words: 131
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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I reworked LET YOU a little.... let me know what you think


Came to share a glass of wine
and catch a rerun of Sex in the City,
or Law and Order.
To share a joke, a smoke.
A kiss a stroke.
A first or second date.
It was too late,
and too early in our acquaintance
for me to acquiesce
to what you have in mind.
TO the need I have inside
I want to let you
slide your lips
across my collar bone
glide your hips
and smooth the tremors.
I sip the wine
and focus on the
Not the touch of your hands
your demands.
I think of what should be, could be
would be if I turned my head
and met your lips
rise my hips
and deided which way to take the date.

Submitted on 2005-04-30 16:13:47     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  sounds like sex but its sweet and alot of people will be able to relate to this poem sort of gets you in the mood its good at getting your heart beat up and running hopefully thats what your looking for
| Posted on 2005-04-30 00:00:00 | by darkonesgirl | [ Reply to This ]

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