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    dots Submission Name: Where Nightmares Collidedots

    Author: ashlee_jane2003
    ASL Info:    25-female-Georgia
    Elite Ratio:    3.37 - 216/214/41
    Words: 138
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
    Total Views: 1715
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       I have gotten so many great comments for this one that I decided to post it again for all the new people that haven't seen it yet. Thanks to all the people that commented and posted it as a favorite. I really appreciate it.

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    dotsWhere Nightmares Collidedots

    In the bowels of pain
    Where angels have cried
    Where the howlings of demons
    Harmoniously collide
    And pleas of forgiveness
    Forever denied
    For torturous memories
    One tries so hard to hide
    This is the dreamscape
    A dowry of sin
    This is the prison
    Where nightmares begin
    In this cavernous hell
    Created in mind
    Where even angels lie hopeless
    Abused and denied
    Their prayers unanswered
    Forever entwined
    In maddening echos
    Of things far behind
    This is the shadow
    Cast endless and cold
    This is the darkness
    Where nightmares unfold
    In this feverish void
    Where angels are slain
    Where the torments rip
    Through a subliminal domain
    And demons wonder
    Forever insane
    With thunderous whispers
    So loud and profane
    This is the anger
    That boils inside
    This is the fury
    Where nightmares collide

    Submitted on 2005-04-30 16:25:49     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this has a very subtle rhyme scheme...it just happens nicely..i am not much for rhyme..but yours is natural...

    and this is very very dark...with some delicious images...

    i like this

    | Posted on 2011-06-03 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]
      your right I did like that one, it made me think of being captured and trying to escape,For torturous memories
    One tries so hard to hide
    This is the dreamscape
    A dowry of sin
    This is the prison
    Where nightmares begin
    In this cavernous hell
    Created in mind
    Where even angels lie hopeless
    Abused and denied
    these are the lines that made me think that which is awesome
    | Posted on 2005-05-06 00:00:00 | by Fadingperson | [ Reply to This ]
      Pretty amazing stuff. I'm with Rachel (Nebnim) this explores a completely different world than most people think about.

    And pleas of forgiveness
    Forever denied
    Where even angels lie hopeless
    Abused and denied

    The create images in my mind of angels that are really used to being a bit tougher than others and on the winning side of the battle. They're used to being the big boys on the block and now they're wimpering a bit. Their rules just don't apply here. Someone else is calling the shots. Spectacular imagery.

    | Posted on 2005-05-05 00:00:00 | by Lost Sheep | [ Reply to This ]
      wow. i agree with hagerina, a lot of gothic imagery that was absolutely incredible. so sad about the angels though... well, this was very, very good. very much enjoyed.
    | Posted on 2005-05-01 00:00:00 | by Phoenix2004 | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a very nice write. I enjoyed it very much.I especially liked the descriptive metaphors.I rank this with some of DeadPoet's best and dance of demons by Shakirra; instant fave!I'll have to read more of your stuff.
    | Posted on 2005-05-01 00:00:00 | by DarkenedSoul | [ Reply to This ]
      Still as powerful as before. Again really like this one.
    This is a dreamscape
    A dorwy of sin
    This is the prison
    Where nightmares begin
    Great.. My take: Right before you fall asleep
    that moment when everything is still and the not knowing if tonight, dreams are your friend or the emeny.
    | Posted on 2005-04-30 00:00:00 | by childs | [ Reply to This ]
    First, thank you for your comment (and compliment) on my work. It is much appreciated. You have a very eloquent way of speaking. I wonder, do you talk like you write? This poem touches me. The talk of Angel's and their pain (something I believe scarce few write about) makes me sad, but relieved in a sense.
    "In this cavernous hell
    Created in mind
    Where even angels lie hopeless
    Abused and denied"
    I look forward to speaking with you again, and reading more of your work. I just signed on to this site, but I'll have much more of my work posted soon. Be well
    | Posted on 2005-05-03 00:00:00 | by nebnim | [ Reply to This ]

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