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    dots Submission Name: All We Aredots
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    Author: Aken Sol
    Elite Ratio:    3.93 - 197/204/67
    Words: 225
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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       I wrote this with some friends. Crtiques or any opionions are welcome and much appreciated.

    Aken Sol


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    dotsAll We Aredots
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    They say everyone has
    their own road to walk
    but, you know, sometimes
    I think we're all alone,
    just stumbling along
    I guess, in our own forests
    and they're all wrong
    because there are absolutely
    no paths at all
    and we're lost.

    Lost in our minds
    and in our emotions.
    We're trapped, all alone.
    No one to turn to except ourselves
    for the strength, courage, and hope
    which we gave each other.
    How can we leave our past behind?
    We've grown so much
    and we've done it together.
    How can we part ways?

    I've always felt we were secret brothers,
    denounced separately from society
    as outcasts, but we found each other.
    Sharing moments time cannot comprehend;
    blind leading the blind in sunshine.
    I guess you caught your sight because you left
    when you found your road without me.
    Eternally lost for a moment of
    belonging, leaving no tears of regret
    as I'm left standing alone in the night.

    Being alone has
    left us for the better.
    Sharing a soul, as Lennon said
    and everyone knows,
    "I am he as
    you are he as
    you are me as
    we are all together,"
    which is why we can't
    ever stay together.
    I guess, suppose, who knows
    we're separate; dissevered.
    And everyone,
    now I know that,
    well, we're lost,
    lost in our forests
    forever.




    Submitted on 2005-04-30 17:14:00     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      wow...this was extremely thought-provoking. i've never thought of things this way...that in the end we have to find our own paths. anyway, this poem was beautiful in its simplicity...it seems to me that it's general enough to touch everyone, but personal enough to have a sense of reality and truth. i love it.
    ~anabel
    | Posted on 2005-04-30 00:00:00 | by purple dinosaur | [ Reply to This ]


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