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    dots Submission Name: Beginning Enddots

    Author: SouthrnQT
    ASL Info:    24/ Female/ Florida
    Elite Ratio:    4.51 - 290/271/31
    Words: 70
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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       Amazing how much poetry one can write when they're depressed and lost after a break up huh?

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    dotsBeginning Enddots

    Darkness seeps into my chest
    A constant reminder of love lost
    The beat of your heart still Pounding in my ears
    Your kisses still linger on my lips
    empty promises lie stagnent in the air
    Forever will my heart weep in silence
    Silence... My soul cries out.... unheard
    Sleep my only Solace...
    Eyes heavy as they fall, welcoming the midnight Behind lidded curtains
    The beginning to an end........

    Submitted on 2005-04-30 18:08:08     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      that's purely painful. you're right, it's amazing how much we can write when we're hurting. it's almost like if we're happy then we're numb. but every now and then someone comes along and it's happiness that's so overwhelming that you write as passionately as you ever have. i'm going thru that right now...
    i'm sorry you went thru that pain...i hope there will be an end to it.
    | Posted on 2005-05-24 00:00:00 | by treybur | [ Reply to This ]
      nice i like. personally i kinda think writing is an outlet, so it's only natural that there's so much more to write when one's upset, after all if it's an outlet, who really wants to write when they're happy? Back to this poem though. Very appeasing, good word, choice and picture. however i do think a change in formation would benefit it some.
    | Posted on 2005-05-12 00:00:00 | by dismentled | [ Reply to This ]
      Were always better writers when were in love or have lost one arent we? I like it very heavy in emotion and imagery. Too bad we need to feel the emotions to write isnt it?
    | Posted on 2005-05-02 00:00:00 | by j4wolfe | [ Reply to This ]

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